My travel plans
I'll go to Okinawa in Japan with my friends from tomorrow to 2nd October. I'm excited now but little bit worry I forget something. Anyway, I'll go to beach, swim, diving, shopping, drinking there. I hope I have a good holiday♪
After that I'll go to Australia for work. I hope I get money and travel all of the world.
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..., I'll go to the beach, ...
Notes: While the syntax for most of your writing are correct, I try to provide suggestions to make the sentences flow better. In this case, since you are saying you will work, that implies that you will make some money. Saying "I hope I get money" sounds a bit unnatural, you hope you will have some money left over after spending them on food, clothing and such.
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My travel plans
I'll go to Okinawa in Japan with my friends from tomorrow to until October 2nd. I'm excited now but a little bit worried I will forget something. Anyway, I'll go to beach, i'll go swimming, diving, shopping, drinking there. I hope I have a good holiday♪After that I'll go to Australia for work. I hope I get money and travel all of the world.
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Well-written!
When listing verbs, you can use "... I'll swim, dive, shop, and drink" or "... i'll go swimming, diving, shopping, and drinking", but try and be consistent.
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