IELTS Writing- Task 1 ( please help me correct this note book, thank you
The pie charts below shows the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. In 1991, home ownership was the most popular type of housing, accounting for 60% or more than a half of the pie chart. The next largest sector was social renting, amounting to 23% or nearly one- third of housings. The remaining homes were mostly private renting ( 11%) and social housing (6%).
Sixteen years later, in 2007, the number of home ownership had risen to 70% or almost three quarters of all homes. This was an increase of 10% compared in 1991. Much of the increase in home ownership can be explained by the decrease in social rented homes, which had dropped from 23% to 19%. The percentage of privately rented homes had remained unchanged at 11%. However, there were 5 million more homes in 2007 if compared with 1991. So the number of rented homes had increased despite the same percentage. Social rented homes had decreased from 6% to 3%, it had still remained the least popular type of housing.
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IELTS Writing- Task 1 ( please help me correct this note book, thank you
The pie charts below shows the percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1991 and 2007. In 1991, home ownership was the most popular type of housing, accounting for 60%, or more than a half of the pie chart. The next largest sector was social renting, amounting to 23%, or nearly one-third of housings. The remaining homes were mostly private renting ( 11%) and social housing (6%).Sixteen years later, in 2007, the number of home ownership had risen to 70% or almost three quarters of all homes. This was an increase of 10%, when compared in to/with 1991. Much of the increase in home ownership can be explained by the decrease in social rented homes, which had dropped from 23% to 19%. The percentage of privately rented homes had remained unchanged at 11%. However, there were 5 million more homes in 2007 if compared with 1991. So, the number of rented homes had increased despite the same percentage. Social rented homes had decreased from 6% to 3%, it had still remained the least popular type of housing.
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Very well-written.
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