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The Debate About the Idea of Changing the Legal Age ( ESSAY) (any mistakes? ) o.O The big debate as to whether the legal age should be raised to 21 is an ongoing issue. There are both arguments for and against this matter. First of all have the enough age to do something, it depends on different facts because we should be aware of the risks that take Young people as for example a teenager of 16 or 17 years old musn´t a driving license, Why? because they´re very young. I certainly believe that It´s necessary considerer the level of education because in some countries, the education decreases more and more preventing us from being able to do certain activities. On other hands, it has long been my feeling that there are more facilities since technology´s process and that become us more lazy. Without doubt, many of us are witnesses that the last generation was more independent tan the actual generation because before people used to effort to achieve what they wanted but nowadays, everything are within reach only a `CLICK`. People are convinced that it´s betther raise the age because It´s the only solution more eficient at the moment to prevent accidents as using our mobile phone while we´re driving that provocate accidents. Although, this can be more of a question of experience and obedience to being a driving young as opposed to a question of age, if adolescents are more likely to be able to access more advanced technology more often, it stands to reason that raising the legal age would simply delay any potential problems rather than solving them. In conclusion, the experience that the teenagers need ,it depends country´s situation ,customs and education. Nevertheless the technology is a important fact because we should know how to give it a good use and to keep a control so a good teaching young people can prevent some problems in the future

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The Debate About the Idea of Changing the Legal Age ( ESSAY) (any mistakes? ) o.O

The big debate as to whether the legal age should be raised to 21 is an ongoing issue. There are both arguments for and against in this regard. First of all whether or not one is old enough to do something depends on the situation. We should be aware of the risks that young people take. For example, a teenager of 16 or 17 years old cannot hold a driving license. Why? Because they´re too young.

I certainly believe that it is necessary to consider the level of education, because in some countries, the level of education is decreasing more and more, and that is preventing us from being able to do certain activities. On the other hand, it has long been my feeling that things are easier due to technological processes and that makes  us lazier.

Without doubt, many of us are aware that the last generation was more independent than the current generation because before people had to make an effort to achieve what they wanted, but nowadays, everything is within reach with only a `CLICK`.
People are convinced that it is better to raise the age requirement as it is the only efficient solution at the moment to prevent accidents. For example, using our mobile phone while we are driving causes accidents. 


Although this can be more of a question of experience and obedience as opposed to a question of age, if adolescents are increasingly likely to be able to access more advanced technology more frequently, it stands to reason that raising the legal age would simply delay any potential problems rather than solving them.

In conclusion, the experience that teenagers need depends on a country´s situation, customs and levels of education. Nevertheless, technology is a important factor because we should know how to make good use of it and how to keep a control of it, so that with good teaching of young people we can prevent problems in the future.

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