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Children today find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in schools. More often than not, it can be observed that children are easy to lose their attention in schools. Objectively, this phenomenon can be ascribed to that children need to face more attractive thing nowadays. Teaching in an interesting way and training children's abilities of concentration are the solution to this problem. Adults may lose control in the modern society, let alone children. First of all, some children are allowed to bring smart phones to schools. Obviously, these smart phones, though useful in various ways, disturb them during classes. Someone choose to download English applications for learning, while others are absorbed in internet games. A recent study, from the Department of Psychology at the Peking University, showed that 23% students had experiences that playing games during a whole class;45% students said they viewed website during classes and nearly 100% students confirmed that they checked messages in classes. In addition, sleeping very late make them do not have enough energy to keep awake in classes. Since this problem has emerged, we can solve it in two aspects. On the one hand, teachers should abandon traditional teaching styles that teachers output knowledge on one side. The interaction between teachers and students can make classes more attractive. On the other hand, concentration training is really effective.The  Renmin primary school from China has set a good example, by introducing meditation classes, aiming to improve student's self-discipline. Amy, a 5-grade student, said that she would not play her smart phone during class because she learned self-control is courage under another form from meditation classes. In conclusion, owing to young need face so much lure currently, it is hard for them to concentrate in schools as people from the past. Therefore, not merely teachers should utilize an appealing way to teach but also students need attention practices.

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Children today find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in schools.

More often than not, it can be observed that children easily lose their attention in schools. Objectively, this phenomenon can be ascribed to that children need increasingly attractive thing nowadays*1. Teaching in an interesting way and training children's ability to concentrate are the solutions to this problem.

Adults may lose control in the modern society, let alone children*2. First of all, some children are allowed to bring smart phones to schools. Obviously, these smart phones, though useful in various ways, disturb them during classes. Someone choose to download English applications for learning, while others are absorbed in internet games. A recent study, from the Department of Psychology at the Peking University, showed that 23% students had experiences of playing games during a whole class, 45% students said they browsed websites during class, and nearly 100% students confirmed that they checked messages in classes*3. In addition, sleeping very late makes them do not to have enough energy to keep awake in classes.

Since this problem has emerged, we can solve it in two aspects. One, teachers should abandon traditional teaching styles, where teachers only output knowledge on one side*4. The interaction between teachers and students can make classes more attractive. Two, concentration training is really effective*5. The Renmin Primary School from China has set a good example by introducing meditation classes--aiming to improve student's self-discipline. Amy, a 5th grade student, said that she would not play with her smart phone during class because she learned self-control and showed courage under as another form benefit from meditation classes.

In conclusion, owing to young need face so much lure currently, it is hard for them to concentrate in schools as people from the past it is much harder for students to concentrate compared to the past because of the temptations the younger generation faces.  Therefore, not merely teachers should utilize an appealing way to teach, but also students need attention practices.

*1 The first two edits simply use shorter words to help the sentence flow more naturally.  

*2 Again, while the original made sense grammatically, this shortened version strengthens your statement by a bit.

*3 I changed the semi-colon to a comma because you were in the middle of giving a list of conclusions of the study.  You do not need to repeat "in/during class" every time as it is already understood.

*4 The comma was needed because the second part was an explanation on what "styles" is referring to.  The word "only" is used to emphasize the problem with the method. 

*5 The phrases "on one hand vs. on the other hand" are used to compare contrasting/opposite view points, which was not true in this case.

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