IELTS Writing task 1: tv and radio
This graph illustrated radio and television audiences during the day in UK in 1992.
As we can see, as a rule, the use of television was more common, even though radio was more widespread during the morning.
In particular, from 6 a.m. to 1 p.m., people who listened to the radio were more than the ones who were watching tv. Radio audences reached the peak of approximately 28% at 8 a.m., while television audience never overcame 10% untill midday.
From 1 p.m. on, audiences show an opposite trend: the television one started to increase, whereas radio one declined sharply.
The amount of people watching television grew abruptly and hit the highest point at 8 p.m., when it reached almost 50% of UK population. At the same hour, people listening to the radio were less than 10%. After 8 p.m. audiences decreased for both the sectors: at 3 a.m. their percentage was less than 2%.
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IELTS Writing task 1: tv and radio
This graph illustrated illutrates (or.. represents) radio and television audiences during throughout the day in the UK in 1992.As we you can see, as a rule, the use of television was more common overall, even though (the use of) radio was more widespread predominant during the morning.
In particular, from between 6 a.m. to and 1 p.m., people who listened to the radio were more than the ones who were watching tv outnumbered those watching tv. Radio audiences reached the a peak of approximately 28% at 8 a.m., while television audiences never overcame were less than 10% untill up until midday.
From 1 p.m. (onwards), audiences showed (stay in past tense) an opposite opposing trend: the television one audience started to increase, whereas the radio one audience declined sharply.
(your use of 'one' would normally be ok, but it doesn't sound natural in this situation.. 'one' needs to be used with an adjective, like 'the red one', 'the English one', 'the complicated one' - 'television audience' is a 'compound noun'.. so it would be correct to say, for example.. The LARGE television audience was louder than the SMALL one (the small 'television audience'). - 'television audience' is the noun, large and small are the adjectives)
The amount of people watching television grew abruptly (throughout the afternoon) and hit the highest point peaked at 8 p.m., when it reached almost 50% of UK population. At the same hour time , people listening to the radio were totalled less than 10%. After 8 p.m. audiences decreased for (or.. in) both the sectors. At 3 a.m. their percentage was both audiences were less than 2%.
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IELTS Writing task 1: tv and radio
This graph illustrated shows radio and television audences audience during the day in UK in 1992.As we can see, as a general rule, the use of television was more common, even though radio was more widespread during the morning.
In particular, from 6 a.m. to 1 p.m., people who listened to the radio were more than those ones who were watching tv. Radio audences audience reached the peak of approximately 28% at 8 a.m., while television audience never overcame 10% until midday.
From 1 p.m. on, audences audience shows an opposite trend: the television one started to increase, whereas radio one declined sharply.
The amount of people watching television grew abruptly and hit the highest point at 8 p.m., when it reached almost 50% of UK population. At the same hour, people listening to the radio were less than 10%. After 8 p.m. audences audience decreased for both the sectors: at 3 a.m. their percentage was less than 2%.
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