A meeting
Hi, Leon,
I attended a meeting last month, some five-star hotels came to Wuhan who wanted to develop Wuhan hotel's market. I got several good price from them, also some good manners we can use it at our own customers meeting.
First, they introduced the hotel with PPT, the exquisite pictures and background music attract our attention very much.
Second, they prepared the lunch for the meeting, it's thoughtful.
At the end, everyone had a gift from hotels, the little surprise made everyone felt happy.
Although the details are small, the participants are satisfied, it's very important. I suggest, we can prepare ours meetings like this in the future.
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A meeting
Hi, Leon,I attended a meeting last month. Some five-star hotels owners/managers/shareholders ( If you say "five star hotels came", it sounds like the hotel buildings came. Rather specify who represented those 5 star hotels in the meeting)came to Wuhan who because they wanted to develop Wuhan its ("its" refers to Wuhan. Try not to repeat words, especially in the same sentence) hotel's market. I got several good prices from them and also some good manners that we can use it at our own customers' meetings.
First, they introduced the hotel with using a PPT, the with exquisite pictures and background music, which really attracted our attention very much.
Secondly, they prepared the lunch for the meeting, it's which was thoughtful.
At the end, everyone had received a gift from the hotels. This little surprise made everyone felt feel happy.
Although the details were small, the participants are were satisfied, it's and that was very important. I suggested that we can prepare ours meetings like this in the future.
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A meeting
Hi Leon,I attended a meeting last month, some five-star hotels came to Wuhan who wanted to develop Wuhan hotel's hotels' market. I got several good prices from them, also some good manners we can use it at our own customers meeting.
First, they introduced the hotel with a PPT, the exquisite pictures and background music attracted our attention very much a lot.
Second, they prepared the lunch for the meeting, it's it was thoughtful.
At the end, everyone had received a gift from hotels, the little surprise made everyone felt happy.
Although the details are were small, the participants are were satisfied, it's was very important. I suggested, we can should prepare ours meetings like this in the future.
Notes: I really liked your essay and it was well written. Be careful when you are using your tenses, if it is in the past, use past tense. For example, 'was' instead of 'is' :) I hope this was helpful
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