IELTS writing practicing: Should government spend more money on arts?
As modern life has undergone great changes, people’s ideas about how government should distribute revenue are also greatly divided. While somebody believes that government should spare more expense on arts, it is also argued that there are more valuable things for government to care about. The following essay will debate the two statements in further detail.
Admittedly, appreciating fine arts is an effective way to develop citizen’s taste, through which people’s spiritual world could be colorful as well. However, the huge effect on people’s spirit would easily fail to work without a solid material foundation. Once government paid more on arts, the expenses on other things like infrastructure or pension would be less, therefore, poor people’s benefits damaged.
(This is only the fisrt two paragraghs of my composition because the whole article may be too long to modify. I really hope someone would give me some advice. Thanks!)
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As modern life has undergone great changes, people’s ideas about how government should distribute revenue have become greatly divided. While some believe that government should spend more on the arts, it is also argued that there are more valuable things for government to care about. The following essay will debate the two sides in further detail.
Admittedly, appreciating fine arts is an effective way to develop citizens' tastes, through which people’s spiritual world could be more colorful as well. However, the huge effect on people’s spirit could easily fail to work without a solid material foundation. Once government spends more on the arts, the expenses for other things like infrastructure or pensions would be less, therefore, possibly damaging poor people’s benefits.
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