[ I was in Hong Kong 38 ]
Would you mind correcting my sentences? If you were me, how would you go about describing this?
[Second Day Part-Three]
I went to Nan Lian Garden. There were an beautiful garden, a big pound and a very beautiful golden temple. Excellently, the all things were cleaned and looked after specially these plants by management of Hong Kong government. The entrance was free.
Then, I went to Kowloon Walled City Park. Which was Kowloon Walled City until 1997. I checked the some websites and the history. It's interesting. I saw several pictures, which were exhibited at a building.
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[ I was in Hong Kong 38 ]
[Second Day Part-Three]I went to Nan Lian Garden. There were an It was a beautiful garden with a big pond and a very beautiful golden temple. Excellently, all the facilities things were cleaned and well looked after, especially these plants which were managed by management of the Hong Kong government. **The entrance was free. Visitors are granted free access to the garden.
Then, I went to Kowloon Walled City Park, which was formally the site of Kowloon Walled City until 1997. I checked some websites and read up on its the history. It's interesting. I saw several pictures, which were exhibited in a building.
Hi Hiro,
Talking about the Kowloon Walled City, I tried to visit the Walled City when I was there in 2002, not knowing that it was demolished years ago. I walked around the City Park, asking for directions to the Walled City in vain. If I had known, I would have visited the Walled City when I was in Hong Kong in 1994.
I added some phrases and sentences in blue.
** Personally, I felt that it sounds odd to say that "The entrance was free." I believe what you meant was the fact that you do not need to pay to enter the premises. So, I included the blue sentence.
Hope this helps.
Cheers,
Lance
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I went to Nan Lian Garden. It was a beautiful garden with a big pond and a very beautiful golden temple. The whole garden was perfectly looked after and spotlessly cleaned especially the plants that were under the management of the Hong Kong government. The entrance was free.
Then, I went to Kowloon Walled City Park, it was called the Kowloon Walled City until 1997. I checked the some websites and the history of this place and found it really interesting. I saw several pictures, which were exhibited in the building.
I hope my corrections help you! Good luck with your studies and if you ever need help don't hesitate to ask ! :)
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