Running

Today is was (<--如果现在凉快下来了或者今天已经基本上过去了，那应该用 "was"。) a crazy hot day, but I suddenly had an urge to take go for a run this afternoon, and I didn't know why. Actually, I've not run for years, so it was kind of a challenge for me. I had been running for a half hour without music until my body was all wet with sweat and my throat was so dry. I was too exhausted to be standing when I got home, so I just laid on the floor. My minds was completely blank; all of the worlds was my surroundings were so quiet at that moment but except for my heartbeats and my breath. Now, my muscles are sore. I don't think I can do any exercises in the following days.

写得不错，Luo。希望你休息好了。小心英文的连词用法：如果我们把两个句子并称一个，这两个句子之间必须要有连词。要不然的话，我们可以用分号分别，但是我们不可以光用逗号分别。

希望我帮了你忙。有问题请别怕问 =)

Running

Running

Actually, I've not run for years, so it was kind of a challenge for me. I had been running for a half an hour without music until my body was all wet with sweat, my throat was so dry.

I was too exhausted to stand when I got home, I just laid on the floor, my mind was completely blank, all of the world was so quiet at that moment but my heart beat and my breath.

Now, my muscles are sore.

I don't think I can do any exercise in the following coming days.

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