Search from various English teachers...
Italy flagArianna
Getting lost This happened three years ago. It was summer and the weather was too hot, so I and my best friend Alicia decided to do a trip on mountain. We looked for fresh, fun and adventure, so we prepared our bag with a basic survival kit: two bottles of water, some sandwiches, fruits, sleeping bag and a map. We decided to leave early in the morning because we wanted walk while the day and we wanted arrive at the top of the mountain before night. The next day we were going to trip. All had been ready! At 4.00 am the alarm clock sounded. We woke up and went to the train station. We took the train from Milan to Bolzano. When we arrived at the Milan Central Station, the train was waiting at platform 21. In a few minutes we left and then arrived at destination on time. Finally our adventure was starting! We crossed the centre of the city and arrived to the base of the mountain. We looked the pathway indication, so we walked in that direction. After 4 hours we were at half of our path. We were still full of energies, although we were walking for 30 kilometers. We stopped for lunch time and then we continued walk along the way. We walked for many other kilometers, when I realized that the map had missed! We got lost.. and we didn’t know where we were. We had to turn round and go back in the opposite direction. We walked for 2 hours but the way looked different than before. We were scared and the foot didn’t want move again. We were waiting for someone.. or maybe for a miracle! The night was arriving and we didn’t know how come back. It was so dark. Suddenly we looked a light. A group of younger guys were walking towards us. They were a boys scout! We were safe. We passed the night with them. The day after they gave us a new map and finally we were able to find the right way to home.

Corrections · 4

1

Getting lost

This happened three years ago. It was summer and the weather was too hot, so I and my best friend Alicia decided to do a trip on take a trip to the mountain.

We  were looking looked for fresh  fun and adventure.  We prepared our bag with a basic survival kit: two bottles of water, some sandwiches, fruits, sleeping bag and a map.  We decided to leave early in the morning because we wanted to walk while in the day and we wanted arrive at the top of the mountain before night.

The next day we were going to start the trip. All had been made ready!  At 4.00 am the alarm clock sounded. We woke up and went to the train station. We took the train from Milan to Bolzano. When we arrived at the Milan Central Station, the train was waiting at platform 21. In a few minutes we left and then arrived at our destination on time.

Finally our adventure was starting! We crossed the centre of the city and arrived to at the base of the mountain. We looked for the pathway indication and so walked in that direction.

After 4 hours we were at the halfway mark of our path journey. We were still full of energy although we were walking for 30 kilometers. We stopped for lunch time and then we continued our walk along the way.
We walked for many other more kilometers when I realized that the map had gone missing.  We had got lost and we didn’t know where we were.


We had to turn around and go back in the opposite direction. We walked for 2 hours but the way looked different than before. We were scared and the foot our feet didn’t want move again.
We were waiting for someone or maybe for a miracle! The night was arriving and we didn’t know how to get come back.

It was so dark. Suddenly we looked saw a light. A group of younger guys were walking towards us. They were boy scouts. We were safe.  We passed the night with them.

The day after they gave us a new map and finally we were able to find the right way to home.



This is well written and wholly understandable.  I hope you found the changes useful being mainly grammatical and sentence structure corrections.  Some of your sentences are very short which can be useful sometimes for effect. For instance, 'It was so dark. Suddenly we saw a light'. However, in other places it might be more desirable to maintain flow by joining phrases together, for instance; 'We were safe and passed the night with them'.

1

Getting lost

This happened three years ago. It was summer and the weather was too hot, so I and my best friend Alicia decided to climb the mountain.

We looked for freshness, fun and adventure, so we prepared our bag with a basic survival kit: two bottles of water, sandwiches, fruit, sleeping bag and a map.
We decided to leave early in the morning because we wanted to walk during daylight and reach the summit before nightfall.

The next day we were going to go. All was ready!
At 4.00 am the alarm clock sounded. We woke up and went to the train station. We took the train from Milan to Bolzano. When we arrived at Milan Central Station, the train was waiting at platform 21. In a few minutes we left and then arrived at our destination on time.

Finally our adventure was starting! We crossed the centre of the city and arrived at the base of the mountain. We looked for a sign to the pathway and followed in that direction.

After 4 hours we were half way there. We were still full of energy, although we had been walking for 30 kilometers. We stopped for lunch and then continued our walk along the way.

We walked for many more kilometers, when I realized that the map had gone missing! We got lost ... and we didn’t know where we were.
We had to turn round and go back in the opposite direction. We walked for 2 hours but the way looked different than before. We were scared and our feet didn’t want to move again.
We were waiting for someone ... or maybe for a miracle! The night was arriving and we didn’t know our way back.

It was so dark. Suddenly we saw a light. A group of youngsters were walking towards us. They were boy scouts! We were safe. We passed the night with them.

The day after they gave us a new map and finally we were able to find the right way home.

Very well written and exciting!

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today