A time with my kids
Since my children are on school vacation, this afternoon I took a time to be with them. I have two children, a girl and a boy.
We know that gift doesn’t replace presence. Nothing better to show love for them than being with them.
It was very nice and rewarding to see them kidding and very happy. After all, the time passes so quickly that we can’t miss so precious opportunities.
I am grateful to God for the family that I have.
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A time with my kids
Since my children are on school vacation, this afternoon I took a time to be with them. I have two children, a girl and a boy.We know that gifts doesn’t replace presence. Nothing is better to show love for them than being with them.
It was very nice and rewarding to see them kidding and very happy. After all, the time passes so quickly that we can’t miss so such precious opportunities.
I am grateful to God for the family I have.
1- Since time is uncountable, you can't us a countable article like "a". (i.e countable articles: a car, a pet. Uncountable articles: the time, the water, the internet)
2- Either you could say a gift or gifts. Without an article or using a plural to express a general idea or image it tends to sound awkward.
3- Missing the main verb of the sentence (here is fits "is" with the meaning)
4-In this case, "so" is used to emphasis adjectives and adverbs(i.e so hungry, so beautiful, so amazing) while "such" is used to emphasis nouns (i.e such beautiful eyes, such amazing grades, such precious opportunities). There is also a particular way of using "so" with nouns but that is only by adding quantifier adjectives to the sentence (i.e so much money, so many flowers, so little time)
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A time with my kids
Since my children are on school vacation, this afternoon I took some a time to be with them. I have two children, a girl and a boy.We know that gift doesn’t replace their presence. There is no better way nothing better for me to show my love for them than being with them.
It was very nice and rewarding to see them kidding joking around and very happy. After all, the time passes so quickly that we can’t miss so such precious opportunities.
I am grateful to God for the family that I have.
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Hi Camila. Your help is very important to me. thank you so much.
Hi Willson. I believe that, too.
God bless you.
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Spending time with kids is the best time that one can enjoy.
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Your grammar, structure and general meaning are very good here! These mistakes are the usual ones one fixes by practicing (like idioms and colloquial phrases). Just keep on practicing while remembering some details and at some point it becomes a habit. Keep the practice coming!
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