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Can someone help me mark my IELTS writing, thanks a lot! Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). The idea of listing the unpaid community service as a compulsory part of high school curriculum has been vigorously advocated recently. Authority as well as many parents believed that voluntary work greatly contributes to students’ holistic development. I, however, to a large extent disagree with this new approach. Delivering community service is a very practical way for adolescents to learn soft skills. It provides a platform to practice and improve their self-expression, interpersonal skills, problem-solving skills and leaderships through working with a group of people towards goal-orientated tasks. These activities also broader adolescents’ horizons as they will be aware of a variety of social issues and encounter those in needed, especially for those who may otherwise not concerned about their surroundings if the program is not compulsory. Furthermore, when high school students are capable of contributing their value to others, they find their meaning and it helps grow their confidence and self esteem. What is more important? It enriches students’ resumes and increases their competitive advantages for enrolling particular courses in the university. However, I do not think that forcing high school students to volunteer their time for public service could have large impact on their learning. Students are less likely to be motivated to work when they are not paid. Also, these voluntary programs normally set in a very short session and may give students very limited range of work and responsibility, which may lead to undesirable outcomes rather than the advantages mentioned above. Instead, it would be wiser to allocate those restricted time to better equip their final public exam in that tight school syllabus, so that they can achieve a better academic performance with less stress and nail the course they want in the university. In conclusion, there may be few advantages of compulsory social service programs, I believe in reality they are less achievable and could be time-consuming. Thus, I disagree with this new reform in high school.

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Can someone help me mark my IELTS writing, thanks a lot!

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood (US spelling excludes the "u") or teaching sports to younger children).

The idea of listing the unpaid community service as a compulsory part of high school curriculum has been vigorously advocated for recently. Authorities as well as many parents believed that voluntary work greatly contributes to students’ holistic development. I, however, to a large extent disagree with this new approach.

Delivering community service is a very practical way for adolescents to learn soft skills. It provides a platform to practice and improve their self-expression, interpersonal skills, problem-solving skills and leaderships through working with a group of people towards goal-orientated tasks. These activities also broader adolescents’ horizons as they will be aware of a variety of social issues and encounter those in needed, especially for those who may are otherwise not concerned about their surroundings if the program is not compulsory. Furthermore, when high school students are capable of contributing their value to others, they find their meaning and it helps grow their confidence and self esteem. What is more important? It enriches students’ résumés (It is a French borrowed English word) and increases their competitive advantages for enrolling in particular courses in the university.

However, I do not think that forcing high school students to volunteer their time for public service could have large impact on their learning. Students are less likely to be motivated to work when they are not paid. Also, these voluntary programs normally set in a very short session and may give students very limited range of work and responsibility, which may lead to undesirable outcomes rather than the advantages mentioned above. Instead, it would be wiser to allocate those restricted times to better equip themselves for their final public exam in that tight school syllabus, so that they can achieve a better academic performance with less stress and nail the course they want in the university.

In conclusion, there may be a few advantages of compulsory social service programs, but I believe in reality they are less achievable and could be time-consuming. Thus, I disagree with this new reform in high school.

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