The Aging Population with a Declining Birthrate Issue in Japan２
Next, I want to explain “Why the aging population with a declining birthrate issue have happened in Japan? Therefore, I want to show the problems with the aging population with a declining birthrate.”
To begin I explain why the aging population with a declining birthrate issue have happened in Japan. It has two reason. First, death of rate is fall, and the average lifespan improved. According to the Japanese government (2016), “In Japan, living environment, and nutritional condition have improved.” Therefore, “medical technology progress and so on.
From these things, babies and infants, young person of death rate are greatly fall.” From these things, we can know people’s life time is increasing.
Second, declining birth rate cause decline in young population. According to Japanese government (2014) “The number of births are declining tend after first baby boom, and second baby boom.”
From these things, Japan’s declining birth rate is serious.The issue is difficult to solve, because the issue has many causes.
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The Aging Population with a Declining Birthrate Issue in Japan２
Next, I want to explain “Why the aging population with a declining birthrate issue have has happened in Japan? Therefore, I want to show the problems with the aging population with a declining birthrate.” ("Therefore" feels strange here as well. I can almost see it but, you're really just paraphrasing the previous sentence. "Therefore" is unnecessary at the very least.)To begin I explain why the aging population with a declining birthrate issue have has happened in Japan.(You don't need to write out that whole awkward phrase each time. Even once at the beginning would almost be enough. Call it a "phenomenon" throughout the rest of the article.) It has It/This is for two reasons. First, the death/mortality of rate is fallis falling/has fallen, and the average lifespan has improved. According to the Japanese government (2016), “In Japan, the living environment, and nutritional conditions have improved.” Therefore, “This is because of medical technology progress and so on. ("progress in medicine" sounds better. "medical technology" sounds like machines... scanners, MRI, etc..)
From these thingsBecause of this progress, babies, and infants, and young personpeoples' of death/mortality rate are has greatly fallen.” (Better: "The mortality rate of babies and children has greatly fallen." "babies" and "infants" are the same thing basically. But actually, you might want to set this whole thing off somehow, maybe with a "however" somehow or an explanation because this particular fact would suggest an increase in the population of young people, not a decrease. Perhaps it's even irrelevant to mention because of this: i.e., it doesn't strengthen your argument, it's counter to it.) From these things, we can know people’s life time expectancy is increasing.
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Second, a/the declining birth rate has caused a decline in the young population of young people. According to the Japanese government (2014) “The number of births are declining tend after the first baby boom, and second baby booms.” (There were two "baby boom" periods? Right? You could also say "The number of births has tended to decline after the...")
From these thingsfacts, we can recognize that Japan’s declining birth rate is serious. The issue is difficult to solve, because the issue has many causes.
From these thingsfacts, we can recognize that Japan’s declining birth rate is serious. The issue is difficult to solve, because the issue has many causes.
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