The Aging Population with a Declining Birthrate Issue in Japan
Have you ever thought about “the aging population with a declining birthrate? “The ratio of 65 and over has raised, for the first time it exceeded 27 percent.” (Japanese government, 2016) I want to show three main points. First, I will write about “What is the aging population with a declining birthrate? Therefore, show the population by age groups.” Next, I will write about “Why the aging population with a declining birthrate issue have happened in Japan?” Last, I want to write about “What is the solution to solve the issue?” I want to explain three main points.
First, I want to explain, what is the aging population with a declining birthrate issue, and the current situation. Begin with, the aging population with a declining birthrate means that elderly people are increasing, and children are decreasing. Next, I want to show the population by age groups. According to the Japanese government (2016), “population of children under 15 years of age are 1578, 0000 people. It is decline 16, 5000 people”. “The ratio is 12.4 percent, so it is lowest level.” From these means declining birth rate. In addition, according to the Japanese government (2016), “population of 65 years old and over are 3459, 1000 people, It is increase 72, 3000 people compared with the previous”. “Therefore, the ratio of 65 years old and over is 27.3 percent. It reached a record high in 2016.” Besides, “population of 75 years old and over is 1690, 8000 people, it is increase 58, 6000 people, and it continue to be more than population of population under 15 years of age last year.” From these things the population of elderly people is increase. These imply Japan is super aging society.
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In addition, according to the Japanese government (2016), “the population of people 65 years (old/of age) and over are is 3459, 1000 people; it ishas increased 72, 3000 people compared with the previous year/survey/decade”. “Therefore, the ratio percentage of the population of 65 years old and over is 27.3 percent. It reached a record high in 2016.” Besides, “the population of citizens 75 years old and over is 1690, 8000 people, it is increased 58, 6000 people from last year, and it continues to be more than population of the population under 15 years of age last year as it has been since 1970.”(It can't "continue" to be more unless it's for a while, not just last year.) From these things statistics, we can see that the population of elderly people is increasing. These imply Japan is a super aging society. (Ha ha. Keep in mind "super" is not appropriate in formal writing. Maybe "radically aging society")
恐れしいでそよ。日本人はすぐ珍しいですね？実は私の考え方のは、例えば米国で、貧乏の人はたくさん子供を生まれるかもしれません。彼ら、とうとう彼らの子供は多すぎるほど警察や政府を反発して暴動出来ると期待するので。日本でこの問題がありません。他日私は自分の社会の地位を知りたいです。
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The Aging Population with a Declining Birthrate Issue in Japan
Have you ever thought about “the aging population with a declining birthrate? “The ratio percentage of people 65 and over has raisedincreased: for the first time it exceeded 27 percent.” (Japanese government, 2016) ("raised" and "increased" are maybe like 上げた and 増加した?) I want to show three main points. First, I will write about “What is the an aging population with a declining birthrate? Therefore, and then show the population by age groups.” ("the" goes better with "the aging... birthrate issue", that it is "the issue". Maybe here you mean to say that you will first describe the extent of the problem. So then "To what degree is the population aging and the birthrate declining: population by age groups" is good I think and also gives variety to this long awkward phrase. "Therefore" is more like だから I think.) Next, I will write about “Why the aging population with a declining birthrate issue have has happened in Japan?” Last, I want to write about “What is the solution to solve the issue?” ("solution" implies "solve") I want to explain three main points. (A little strange, you kind of already said this earlier...)First, I want to explain, what is the aging population with a declining birthrate issue, and the current situation. To begin with, the aging population with a declining birthrate means that elderly people are increasing, and children are decreasing. Next, I want to show the population by age groups. According to the Japanese government (2016), “the population of children under 15 years of age are is 1578, 0000 people. It is has declined 16, 5000 people since last year(? "decline" from when? Also "population is" not "are" and I won't change this but I think in English speaking countries, it's usually commas after 3 digits, "15,780,000" because they don't have 万)”. “The ratio This is 12.4 percent of the total population, so it is at its lowest level since 1900(? Also, as earlier "ratio" is not appropriate. The ratio of births in hospitals to births at home is 5:2. It's a comparison.).” From these means we can ascertain a declining birth rate.
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