Hi everyone,

I am trying to improve my English day by day. Can you please help me edit this first notebook entry? 

My name is Nancy, I am 23 years old, my hobbies are quite simple, I love reading books, traveling and sometimes shopping with my friend. I graduated in tourism management from National Economic University. I have never worked for a tourism company before but I have some experience working in a hotel. Working as a hotel receptionist I had a chance to communicate with customers from overseas. As you know, I studied tourism so I have knowledge of tours, travel places, hotel, and services. I had an interview for a sales position yesterday. They asked me to write a passage about my thoughts on tourism and what I will do to improve my work in the future. 

And can someone recommend other things to include in my passage?

Thank you so much! 

Try expanding in the “and so on” part of your knowledge you gained at university. Also include more on your duties as a hotel receptionist. Did you arrange tours, transport, guest pick up, airport drop off etc. Move the hobbies to the end of the passage. I hope this helps,

Kind regards,

Andy