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an unhappy supper My mom invited her friends to have supper at home today, so she was very happy and had started to prepare very early in the afternoon. Actually I don't like having supper with mom's friends at all because they are women aged at about 40 to 50 years old who are always nosey and like talking about others' secrets. At supper, they were talking in a loud voice and compairing with each other, everyone tried her best to show off and talked bad things behind the person's back who they didn't like while I had to keep silence to show my respect to them. I am really fed up with these person, it seems that they live in others lives instead of theirs. If you pay so much attention to each others' secrets, how can you manage well your own life? God gives everyone the same chance to live a different and colourful life, so everyone should appreciate and cherish it and make good plans to live it well. However, these nosey people just satisfy themselves by finding out each others scandals instead of searching for the true meaning of life. Everyone has their own way to live and these kind of people exists everywhere in the world, I can't force them to change, so just let it be.

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An Unhappy Supper  - Need to CAPITALIZE every word in a title.

My mom invited her friends to have supper at home today.  so sShe was very happy and had looking forward to it and started to prepare preparations very early in the afternoon. Actually I don't like having supper with mom's friends. at all because 1.  They are women aged at about 40 to 50 years old who are always nosey and like talking about others' secrets gossipy. At supper, they were talking in a loudly voice and making compairing comparisons about other people.  with each other, everyone Each of these harpies2 tried her best to show off and talked bad things behind the person's back bad mouthed those who they didn't like.  All this while I had to keep silencet to show my respect to for them. I am really fed up with these person them. It seems that they live in others dwell on lives of others instead of theirs own. If you pay so much attention to each others' secrets of others, how can you manage well your own life affairs3? God gives everyone the same chance to live a different and colourful life. so everyone should Appreciate and cherish it this life of yours 4 and make good plans to live it well.  However, these nosey people parkers5 just satisfy themselves by finding digging out each others scandals instead of searching seeking for the true meaning of life. Everyone has their own way to live. and Alas6 these kind of people exists everywhere in the world, . I can't force them to change, so just let it be. I guess this is how the cookie crumbles.7

1. You don't like them is not because of their age but their gossipy nature.
2. This is a very good word to use.  Look up in the dictionary and find what actually it means.  It has a nice story to it.
3.  Nothing wrong with the word you use but it has been used so many times that it becomes stale.  So I used another word with the same meaning to break out monotony.
4.  Again nothing wrong with using "it".  I added these extra words for emphasis and makes the piece comes to life.
5.  Another great phrase you should put under your belt!  http://www.phrases.org.uk/meanings/nosy-parker.html
6. This is putting emphasis on your lament.  Makes your writing shine out.  However over use will make it boring and pendantic.
7.  Again there is nothing wrong with what you wrote.  I added this to add more colour to your piece.  Also it is a good way to learn new phrases.

You are a good writer with great ideas to write.  This is the sort of things that people will read in great interest as we all share similiar experiences of this sort.  It is a great pleasure to edit your writing and I look forward to read more.  I am very sure your progress in English will be swift.  Oh yes, please disregard the earlier "correction".  My computer crashed just as I was about to start on the correction.  Great work!
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An unhappy Supper

My mom invited her friends to have supper at home today, so she was very happy and had started to prepare very early in the afternoon. Actually I don't like having supper with mom's friends at all because they are women aged at about 40 to 50 years old who are always nosey and like talking about others' secrets. At supper, they were talking in a loud voice and compairing with each other, everyone tried her best to show off and talked bad things behind the person's back who they didn't like while I had to keep silence to show my respect to them. I am really fed up with these person, it seems that they live in others lives instead of theirs. If you pay so much attention to each others' secrets, how can you manage well your own life? God gives everyone the same chance to live a different and colourful life, so everyone should appreciate and cherish it and make good plans to live it well. However, these nosey people just satisfy themselves by finding out each others scandals instead of searching for the true meaning of life. Everyone has their own way to live and these kind of people exists everywhere in the world, I can't force them to change, so just let it be.

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