Third homework. (book report.)
Title: Love story Author: Erich Segal
I've finished reading up to page 10 of page 55.
Oliver is Harvard sportsman as I told you before.
Jenny thought Harvard sportsman are stupid.
They meet at the library.
Oliver asked her about book which he need.
She called him "preppie" and she told him " you look stupid and rich...im clever and poor."
Gradually, he got angry of her atitude. But, they are go to cafe and drink coffee togather.
I don't know why. If I were in his position, I definately won't go there.
Sure enough it was mistakes, they were argue.
But, Oliver invited her to hocky mach on Friday night. Because he plays hocky.
And, she accept his invitations.
On the Friday night, he didn't look up at Jenny once, but he hoped she was watching him.
And then he got a chance to goal, he usually pass the puck to his teammate Davey Johnson.
But this time, he wanted to score this goal himself but he couldn't.
Because before he could shoot, one of the person who opponent was after him.
And then they were hitting the puck and each other as hard as they could.
The opponent said "YOU!!"
But he thought this happened has nothing him false and he started argue with the person.
Therefore he required punishment that two min in the penalty box.
Jenny watched whole game and shouted "Go Oliver, go! knock their heads off!" after Oliver's punishment had finished. It's the first time that she show her feelings in front of him.
Finally Oliver's team won the game seven to zero.
They went home each other and he call her.
And he said " I think....im in love with you..."
woooooooooooooooooooow!!!!! excited!!!!!!!!!!!!
Did i make myself clear? It's a pity that lack of my English skills. :(
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Third Homework. (a book report)
Title: Love Story << Nouns in titles should be capitalizedAuthor: Erich Segal
I've finished reading up to page 10 of 55 pages.
Oliver is a Harvard sportsman as I told you before.
Jenny
They meet at the library.
Oliver asked her about a book which he needed.
She called him a "preppie" and she told him " you look stupid and rich...i'm clever and poor."
Gradually, he got angry
I don't know why. If I were in his position, I definitely won't go there.
Sure enough it was a mistake
But, Oliver invited her to a hockey match on Friday night. Because he plays hockey. << is he on the team or is he a fan who plays hockey for fun?
On the Friday night, he didn't look up at Jenny once, but he hoped she was watching him.
And then he got a chance to score a goal. He usually passes the puck to his teammate Davey Johnson but this time, he wanted to score the goal himself but he couldn't.
Because before he could shoot, one of the
And then they were hitting the puck
The opponent said "YOU!!" << Should this be a curse word?
But he thought
Therefore he
Jenny watched the whole game and shouted "Go Oliver, go! Knock their heads off!" after Oliver's punishment had finished. It was the first time that she showed her feelings in front of him.
Finally Oliver's team won the game seven to zero.
They went home with each other and he called her later. He said " I think....I'm in love with you..."
woooooooooooooooooooow!!!!! I'm so excited!!!!!!!!!!!!
Did I make myself clear? It's a pity the lack of my English skills. :(
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Guide: Red=訂正|Blue=推敲|Yellow=わかり難い
よくできました。
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