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Internet abuse, causes and effects Good day everyone!! :) I have to do an essay for my English class! I hope could you help to correct my mistakes! Thank you!! Internet abuse, causes and effects In the last decade there has been an increase in the use of the internet. Although it’s a very useful Media for everyone, it has provoked negative aspects in the life of some people, especially between the teenagers. There is a big difference between the appropriate use of the internet and the abuse of the internet, I mean when the internet becomes an addiction. Some people waste a lot of time on the internet and they forget their normal activities causing less productivity. This type of problem is more usual between teenagers due we spend a lot of time in social networks, chats etc, and we forget to do other things. This causes that we can’t pass time with our family and friends, we forget the school, or even we forget of ourselves, neglecting our personal aspect. Excessive use of the internet can bring health problems also. Many people can develop depression, anxiety or other psychological problems. In summary we can say that the excessive use of the internet can bring serious consequences to a person. It’s for that is very important that we learn to control the time we spend on the internet and use it properly.

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Internet Abuse: Causes and Effects

Good day everyone!! :)

I have to do an essay for my English class! I hope could you help to correct my mistakes! Thank you!!

Internet Abuse: Causes and Effects

In the last decade there has been an increase in the use of the internet. Although it’s a very useful medium (Note: en mi opinion, la palabra mejor es "medium" si usted quiere decir "los medios de comunicación") for everyone, it has provoked negative aspects in the life of some people, especially between in the life of the teenagers.

There is a big difference between the appropriate use of the internet and the abuse inappropriate of the internet. Inappropriate use is I mean when the internet becomes an addiction.

Some people waste a lot of time on the internet and they forget their normal activities which causes causing lessdecreased productivity.
This type of problem is more usual between common among teenagers due because we spend a lot of time in on social networks  social media ("social media" es la palabra más frecuente que "social networks"), chats etc, and we forget to do other things.

This causes us to that we can’t pass time spend less time with our family and friends, we forget the forget our schoolwork, or even we forget of ourselves, neglecting our personal aspect.

Excessive use of the internet can bring health problems also. Many people can develop depression, anxiety or other psychological problems.

In summary we can say that the excessive use of the internet can bring serious consequences to a person. It’s for that very reason that it is very important that we learn to control the time we spend on the internet and use it properly.           

Wow! Este composición es muy buena y informativa! Hay algunos errores de gramática y errores de usos de las palabras. Pero en general, puedo comprender la mayor de la composición. Lo siento para mi español mal :)



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