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For her last week, my company department planned to organize a Spring activity, a remote sea island. The cost of this activity was afforded by our project funds and we were allowed to went there with our families. As a single boy, I felt very bad. Because most of them had a happy family or partner. Just I was alone. 5555~ Suddenly, I thought her who was my university classmate. But during the period of school time, I had never spoken to her.Just like the section in a campus fiction, She was beautiful and intelligent except the most time she was quiet and introverted. As it happened that she took job into my company last year. Now we are working in the same company but we hardly meet each other. We just chat online or call a telephone. I thought her because she once spoke to me she had never seen the sea. Absolutely, this was very good chance to invite her to go with me, we cloud see the blue, wide sea together. But I was also very afraid to be denied by her, after all, I considered that we were the just common friends and she was introverted. Would her like to agree my invitation? I was in trouble for a long time. Finally, I persuaded myself if I didn't try how I get the result of this rare chance. So as you know, I invited her to go for travel with me formally, of course, by sent her message online...

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last week, my company department planned to organize a Spring activity on a remote sea island. The cost of this activity was afforded by our project funds and we were allowed to went go there with our families. As a single boyman, I felt very bad. Because most of them/my colleagues had have a happy family or partner. Just I was alone. 5555~
Suddenly, I thought her of a girl who was my university classmate. (You cannot use a pronoun like "her" until you have introduced her.  Also, even if you had, it would be "I thought of her because she was...") But during the period of school time, I had never spoken to her.Just like the section in a campus fiction, she was beautiful and intelligent except the most of the time she was quiet and introverted. As it happened, that she took a job into my company last year. Now we are working in the same company but we hardly meet each other. We just chat online or call a on the telephone.
I thought of her because she once spoke to told me she had never seen the sea. ("said to me that..." "told me that..." "spoke to me.") Absolutely, this was a very good chance to invite her to go with me, we cloud could see the blue, wide sea together. But I was also very afraid to be denied/rejected by her.  After all, I considered that we were the just common friends and she was introverted. Would her she like to agree to my invitation? ("she" is subject, "her" is object.  also, for future reference: "agree to my proposal" "agree with my opinion") I was in trouble worried for a long time. ("in trouble" is usually more serious, like if your boss is mad at you, you're in trouble, or if you speed too many times and get in trouble with the police.  It can be used more lightly as well, for instance "I was in trouble with her because I forgot her birthday.")
Finally, I persuaded myself that if I didn't try, how would I get the result/benefit of this rare chance. So as you know, I invited her to go for travel with me formally, of course, by sending her a message online... ("as you know" is only appropriate if, for instance, your previous diary entry said that you asked her out, and this one was explaining that.  Otherwise, how would we know beforehand what you did?)

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