IELTS Writing Practice: New Homes In Countryside
Hi, this is an IELTS writing practice, any help will be appreciated!
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TOPIC: In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.
What is your opinion about this?
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Urbanization is an inevitable process while more and more people are moving into cities. As a result, more homes are in demand to meet the increasing population surging into cities. Due to the limited space in cities, countrysides nearby are the ideal place for new houses and apartments.
It is a common sense that many countrysides have been ruined by modern constructions. In most people’s mind, countrysides often come with graceful natural landscapes and slow-paced living rhythm. However, with the development of modernization, villages’ unique sceneries have been disappearing over the past several decades, which is a tremendous sorrow for the many. For example, in China, many ancient villages of high cultural values have been replaced by the uglily concrete buildings. Though those new buildings meet people’s need in a short period, we have lost part of the traditional culture forever. Therefore, Many intellectuals urge that we should protect our traditional countrysides from being damaged.
On the contrast, the housing demand of general public cannot be overlooked. We know that no more space in cities can be squeezed to build new homes for the increasing needs. So, naturally, countrysides is a better choice. According to a survey conducted by a famous media shows that most people prefer to live in a bigger house located in suburb rather than curling up in an expensive and small rental flat. Furthermore, local people can gain more revenue from selling lands to real estate developers and more job opportunities will be available. To put it simply, building new homes in countrysides is an optimum result benefit both the local and residents.
To conclude, it is a fact that the features of countryside will be altered or even ruined by modern buildings being constructed. Whereas, people’s demand of owning a home and the process of urbanization cannot be stopped. In my opinion, such kind of conflict can be mitigated by reasonable planning of construction, the countryside of Netherlands and New York’s Central Park are the best examples of a combination of nature and modern.
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IELTS Writing Practice: New Homes In Countryside
Hi, this is an IELTS writing practice, any help will be appreciated!---------------------------------------------------
TOPIC: In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.
What is your opinion about this?
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On the contrast However the housing demand of general public cannot be overlooked. We know that no more space in cities can be squeezed to build new homes for the increasing needs. So, naturally, countrysides is a better choice (but few want to live where travel time is long). According to a survey conducted by a famous media organisation shows it seems that most people prefer to live in a bigger house located in the suburbs rather than curling up being confined in an expensive and small rental flat. Furthermore, local people can gain more revenue profit from selling lands to real estate developers and more job opportunities will be available. To put it simply, building new homes in the countrysides is an optimum result benefitting both the locality and residents.
To conclude, it is a fact that the features of countryside will be altered or even ruined by modern buildings being constructed. Whereas, Yet neither people’s demand/desire of for owning a home, and nor the process of urbanization cannot be stopped. In my opinion, such kind of conflicts can be mitigated by reasonable planning of construction - the countryside of the Netherlands and New York’s Central Park are the best examples of a combination of nature and with the modern.
Not bad - 6+, 7-
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you are writing too long for IELTS and you should be sure to stick to the test time limit.
IELTS Writing Practice: New Homes In Countryside
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TOPIC: In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.
What is your opinion about this?
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Urbanization is an inevitable process while because more and more people are moving into cities. As a result, more homes are in demand to meet the increasing population surging into cities. Due to the limited space in cities, nearby countryside is nearby are the ideal place for new houses and apartments.
It is a common sense that many much countrysides have has been ruined/spoilt by modern constructions. In most people’s mind, the countrysides (we just don't say c...sides, it is a singular noun) often comes with graceful natural landscapes and slow-paced living rhythm. However, with the development of modernization, villages’ unique scenery hasies have been disappearing over the past several decades, which is a cause of tremendous sorrow for the many. For example, in China, many ancient villages of high cultural values have been replaced by the ugly concrete building complexes. Though those new buildings meet people’s needs in for a short period, we have lost part of the traditional culture forever. Therefore, many intellectuals urge that we should protect our traditional countrysides from being damaged.
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IELTS Writing Practice: New Homes In the Countryside
Hi, this is an IELTS writing practice. Any help will be appreciated!
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TOPIC: In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.
What is your opinion about this?
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Urbanization is an inevitable process, as while more and more people are moving move into cities. As a result, more homes are in demand to meet the increasing population surging into of cities. Due to the limited space in cities, countrysides nearby are the ideal place for new houses and apartments. [State your position here first. Do not keep the evaluator in suspense.]
It is a common sense that Many countrysides have been ruined by modern constructions construction. In most people’s mind, countrysides the countryside often comes with graceful natural landscapes and slow-paced living rhythm. However, with the development of modernization, villages’ unique sceneries have been disappearing over the past several decades, which is a tremendous sorrow for the many. For example, in China, many ancient villages of high cultural values value have been replaced by the uglily ugly concrete buildings. Though those new buildings meet people’s needs in a short period for the short-term, we have lost part of the traditional culture forever. Therefore, many intellectuals urge that we should protect our traditional countrysides from being damaged damage.
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On the contrast On the other hand, the housing demand of general public cannot be overlooked. We know that no more space in cities can be squeezed out to build new homes for the increasing needs. So, naturally, countrysides the countryside is a better choice the alternative. According to A survey conducted by a famous media company shows that most people prefer to live in a bigger house located in a suburb rather than curling curl up in an expensive, and small rental flat. Furthermore, local people can gain more revenue from selling lands to real estate developers, and more job opportunities will be available. To put it simply, building new homes in countrysides the countryside is an optimum optimal result benefiting both the locals and residents home-buyers.
To conclude, it is a fact that the features of the countryside will be altered or even ruined by modern buildings being constructed. Whereas At the same time, people’s demand of for owning a home and the process of urbanization cannot be stopped. In my opinion, such kind of conflict can be mitigated by reasonable planning of construction. The countryside of the Netherlands and New York’s Central Park are the best examples of a combination of nature and modernity.
[Graded 6.5. Additional complex sentences are needed.]
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