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IELTS writing : Should extreme sports be banned because they are too dangerous? There is a growing tendency for people to enjoy extreme sports as their leisure. However, these activities are highly dangerous, and some people insist that they should be prohibited. This essay will argue that people should have the rights to experience extreme sports as they like and to offer these opportunities for business. First, if the government bans these sports, it would have a negative impact on tourism. Nowadays it has become more popular to add such an activity in their trip schedule. Providing these opportunities is significant source of income for the local people. For instance, in some resorts, scuba diving is one of the most attractive activities especially for young adults. In winter, some people living in the mountain make their living by running a skiing ground or working as a skiing instructor. Considering these things, banning these sports would lead not only to limiting people’s pleasure but also to loss of job chances. Second, it is difficult to make rules to control extreme sports. There are various kinds of sports in the world, and most of them have risks of injury to some extent. Thus, there is no distinctive difference in the level of danger. Any attempts to establishing laws of prohibition would end up in vain. Creating rules to ensure the safety should be more realistic and effective. In conclusion, even though extreme sports are somewhat perilous, banning them is an unrealistic solution regarding the popularity and the impact on economy. In my opinion, the government does not need to forbid them as long as they are regulated by law moderately to protect people and the environment. *I would like to know if there are words which can be changed to other high-level words, or if you have another opinion about this topic. This topic was hard for me, so I didn't come up with any concrete supportive ideas. Thank you.

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There is a growing trend for people to enjoy extreme sports for leisure. However, these activities are highly dangerous, and some people insist that they should be prohibited. This essay will argue that people should have the rights to experience extreme sports as they like and to offer these opportunities for business. (My stand/I believe that extreme sports do not have to be banned. These sports are essential in the tourism industry today and instead of a ban on extreme sports, the dangers of these sports should be highlighted in order to aid pople make an informed decision on taking up the sport.)


First, if the government bans these sports, it will have a negative impact on tourism. Nowadays, it has become more popular to add include such an activity in their trip schedule(itinerary). Providing these opportunities is (These sports are usually run/operated by the locals, providing a significant source of income for the local people. For instance, in some resorts, scuba diving is one of the most attractive activities especially for young adults. (Can mention Bali,  Phuket, Langkawi here.. Or Water ski, parasailing) In winter, some people living in the mountains make their living by running a skiing ground or working as a skiing instructor. (winter sports are more popular. In countries like Korea, ski resorts are extremely popular and these tend to be a huge source of income not just to the locals running the ski resort, but also to those in neighbouring towns or cities.) Considering these things, banning these sports would lead not only to limiting people’s pleasure but also to loss of job chances. (Actually, you can just focus on the jobs portion in you mini conclusion here)

Second, it is difficult to make rules to control extreme sports. There are various kinds of sports in the world, and most of them have risks of injury to some extent. Thus, there is no distinctive difference in the level of danger. Any attempts to establishing laws of prohibition would end up in vain. Creating rules to ensure the safety should be more realistic and effective. (I sort of understand your perspective but rather than simply stating that the laws will be ineffective, perhaps you can focus on the underlying reason why it will be ineffective. Extreme sports have a high injury risk but it is still popular because of the immense euphoria and adrenaline it gives. The thrill of doing something dangerous, not commonly experienced in ones' mundane /routine life, is hard to resist. While the sport is dangerous, it is important to recognise the fact that the participants in extreme sports are well aware of the dangers, but went ahead anyway. It is also worth noting that more often than not, these sports are closely regulated and tend to have many safety nets, making them safer than they seem. But the occasional injuries or death can often be attributed to freak accidents if not an overzealous act. Hence I believe it is unfair and impractical to  restrict the opportunities for a thrilling getaway/vacation because of an almost improbable chance of severe injuries or death that extreme sports bring.) something like this?


Not too bad, I like your arguments although they may not seem concrete yet. Just need a bit of beefing up but otherwise, GREAT IMPROVEMENT!

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