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IELTS Writing Practice: Visiting difficulty places Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? --------------------------------------------- We, human beings, is such an interesting creature that we are always full of curiosities, which drive us to seek for unknown and truth. For the general public, even though they are not scientists or professional explorers, they are also inherited the instinct of exploring new places where are hostile to lives. It is undeniable that visiting tough places are full of risks that sometimes even cost lives of tourists. Hackers' bodies were often found in desert or remote mountain areas, which were tremendous tragedies for their families. For those victims, if they just wandered around some guaranteed places, like parks nearby their homes or well-managed sites, they would not have lost their precious as well as vulnerable lives. In some people’s eyes, spending holidays and cash to visit those unfriendly places makes no sense. Furthermore, policemen or emergency workers are involved in rescuing tourists when they have themselves injured at those dangerous areas, which will waste already limited public resources. However, mankind would not have achieved such glorious civilizations if we were only satisfied with familiar surroundings. The spirit of exploring nature and challenging ourselves is carried on everyone’s body. The problem is when and how the spirit will be ignited. For the many individuals, travelling is the very key to arouse and keep their pursuit of seeking for a new world. With the development of transportation, visiting foreign countries or famous heritage sites have never been so easy ever. Thus, people need more challenging places to meet their curiosities. Naturally, places like the Sahara Desert and Antarctic have attracted people’s attention. Through such adventure activities, we can not only pass down the spirit of exploring unknown but also have a better understanding of nature. To conclude, even thought some risks are not avoidable, people should not be discouraged to try their hands on visiting difficult places. The key is, tourists need to be trained and well prepared to handle a variety of emergencies. In my opinion, the spirit of adventure is indispensable as a mature individual.

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IELTS Writing Practice: Visiting difficulty Difficult Places

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? [An opinion is not requested. This is the easiest of all IELTS writing tasks.]
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We, human beings, is are such an interesting creatures that we are always full of curiosities curiosity, which drives us to seek for the unknown and discover truth. For the general public, even though they are not scientists or professional explorers, they are also inherited the instinct of for exploring new places where conditions are hostile to lives human life.

[Transition needed]It is undeniable that visiting tough places are is full of risks that sometimes even cost the lives of tourists. Hackers' The bodies of intrepid travelers were often have been found in deserts or remote mountain areas, which were brought tremendous tragedies for their families. For those victims, if they had just wandered around some guaranteed safer places, like parks nearby their homes or well-managed sites, they would not have lost their precious, as well as vulnerable, lives. In some people’s eyes, spending holidays and cash to visit those unfriendly places makes no sense. Furthermore, policemen or emergency workers are involved in rescuing tourists when they have are themselves injured at in those dangerous areas, which will waste wasting already limited public resources.

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However, mankind would not have achieved such glorious civilizations if we were had been only satisfied with familiar surroundings. The spirit of exploring nature and challenging ourselves is carried on within everyone’s body. The problem is when and how the spirit will be ignited. For the many individuals, travelling is the very key to arouse and keep their pursuit of seeking for a new world. With the development of transportation, visiting foreign countries or famous heritage sites have has never been so easy ever. Thus, people need more challenging places to meet their curiosities curiosity. Naturally, places like the Sahara Desert and Antarctic have attracted people’s attention. Through such adventure activities, we can not only can pass down the spirit of exploring the unknown, but also have a better understanding of nature.


To conclude, even thought though some risks are not unavoidable, people should not be discouraged to try their hands on visiting difficult places. The key is, that tourists need to be trained and well-prepared to handle a variety of emergencies. In my opinion, the spirit of adventure is indispensable as a for mature individuals. [An opinion was not requested, and so the response should be more neutral. Grade 6.5]




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IELTS Writing Practice: Visiting difficulty places

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
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However, mankind would not have achieved such glorious civilizations if we were only satisfied with familiar surroundings. The spirit of exploring nature and challenging ourselves is carried in everyone’s genes body. The problem is when and how the spirit will be ignited. For the many individuals, travelling is the very key to arouse and keep their pursuit of seeking for a new world. With the development of transportation, visiting foreign countries or famous heritage sites has never been so easy ever. Thus, people need ever more challenging places to meet their curiosities. Naturally, places like the Sahara Desert and Antarctic have attracted people’s attention. Through such adventure activities, we can not only pass down the spirit of exploring the unknown but also have a better understanding of nature. good!!!

To conclude, even thought some risks are not unavoidable, people should not be discouraged from trying to try their hands on at visiting difficult places. The key is, tourists need to be trained and well prepared to handle a variety of emergencies. In my opinion, the spirit of adventure is indispensable for as a mature individual.


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IELTS Writing Practice: Visiting difficulty places

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
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(you are writing longer than you need to, or should, this is 340 words)
We, as human beings, is are such an interesting creature that species because we are always full of curiosity, which drives us to seek for understanding of the unknown, and for truth. For the general public, even though they are not scientists or professional explorers, they are also inherited the instinct of exploring new places where which are hostile to lives.

It is undeniable (haha there's that IELTS phrase again) - that visiting tough places are is (visiting is singular) full of risks that sometimes even cost lives of tourists. Hackers' Hiker bodies were are often found in desert or remote mountain areas, which were - tremendous tragedies for their families. For those victims, if they just wandered around some guaranteed patrolled places, like parks nearby their homes or well-managed sites, they would not have lost their precious as well as vulnerable lives. In some people’s eyes, spending holidays and cash to visit those unfriendly places makes no sense. Furthermore, policemen or emergency workers are involved in rescuing tourists when they and may have themselves been injured at in those dangerous areas, which and this will waste already limited public resources.


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