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With the process of urbanization which has been taking place all over the world, more and more rental housings are being supplied to meet the needs of markets. In the past few decades, people have tended to rent rather than owning an accommodation. Does this phenomenon bring more merits than demerits? Here are my thoughts.
Housing prices have been rising continuously in some areas, such as the big cities in China, which means that young adults cannot afford to purchase an apartment. Thus, it has become common sense that people should live in rented accommodation before they have accumulated enough savings. However, if the landlord does not want to renew the lease anymore, it will be quite a troublesome issue to find another suitable rental flat to move into. It is a fairly common worry that many tenants have. But this would never happen when you owned a house.
On the other hand, to some extent, people will be trapped by real estate when they want to move to somewhere else if things have changed, like the downsizing of a company. Obviously, rental housings give people not only another choice but also more freedom.According to research, it shows that many people who are living in the big cities have regretted that they have not bought real estate as early as possible because house prices have increased drastically. Obviously, renting is merely a kind of expense. On the other hand, owning a house is absolutely a smart investment. As a result, due to the increase in housing prices, the gap between rich and poor has been enlarged further.
To conclude, rental housing is flexible and suitable for people who cannot afford to own a house or they do not know whether or not they could settle down in a city permanently. Whereas, when people have a promising job and they are living in a booming area, it might be a better choice to buy an apartment. In my opinion, under certain circumstances, renting or buying can either be an optimum choice or the worst decision possible.
Hello Mona,
This is a nice essay but a little long, your original was 367 words! I have reaaranged a couple of sentences to make the text more coherent, now you have one paragraph taking about renting and another talking about buying. There are a few problems with verb patterns but overall the text was clear and fairly well laid out.
Hope this helps
Bob
IELTS Writing Practice: Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one
Hi, this is an IELTS writing practice, the topic is: Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one- advantages/disadvantagesAny help will be appreciated!
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With the process of urbanization has been taking place all over the world, more and more rental housings are supplied to meet the needs of markets. In the recent few decades, people tend to rent rather than owning an accommodation. Does this phenomenon bring more merits than demerits? Following are my thoughts. this is the restatement of the IELTS question - it has errors but I will not correct them.
The price of housing has/Housing prices have been rising steadily continuously in some areas, such as big cities in of China. This means that , which leads to young adults cannot afford the cost of purchasing an apartment. Thus, it has become a common sense that people should have to live in rental housings before until they have accumulated enough savings. On the other hand, to some extent, people will be trapped by real estate when they want to move to somewhere else when if things/circumstances have changed, like for example the downsizing of a company. Obviously, rental housing gives people not only another choice but also more freedom. mmm not so obviously, but this is an IELTS linking phrase!
According to the research, however, it shows that many people who are living in the big cities have regretted that they have not bought a real estate as early as possible, because the housing prices have increased drastically. In those areas where the housing cost has been rising, Obviously, renting is merely another kind of expense. On the other hand opposite, owning a house is absolutely a smart investment. As a result, due to the increase in housing prices, the gap between rich and poor has been enlarged widened further.
Moreover, if the landlord does not want to renew the lease anymore, it will be quite a troublesome issue to find another suitable rental flat then move into. It is a fairly common worry that many tenants have. But this would never happen when you owned a house.
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IELTS Writing Practice: Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one
Hi, this is an IELTS writing practice, the topic is: Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one- advantages/disadvantagesAny help will be appreciated!
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To conclude, rental housing is agile and suitable for people who cannot afford owing a house or they do not know whether or not they could can settle down in a city permanently, whereas, when people have a promising job and they are living in a booming area, it might be a better choice to buy an apartment. In my opinion, under certain circumstances, renting or buying can either be an optimum choice or the worst decision.
Not bad - in the 6 zone
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