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diary
Today I went shoping with my daughters, Kiko and Momo, and we went to the supermarket.I pushed Momo to the supermarket in a stroller.
Kiko went to the supermarket riding a tricycle.
Diary
Today.i I * went shopping with my daughters, Kiko and Momo, ** to the supermarket.I went pushing pushed Momo in a stroller in Momo to the supermarket.
Kiko went riding rode her tricycle to supermaret there.***
ま子さん、素晴らしいですよ。
A few notes:
* Capital Letters. You used capital letters very well. But the title of the story should be capitalized. Also "I" is always written with a large i.
** Commas are important. Don't use too many of them. But I added commas here to set apart your daughters' names. 読んでください:
"I went shopping with my daughters to the supermarket." - これは完全な文章です. A complete sentence.
"My daughters are Kiko and Momo." - これも完全な文章です。
But you want to combine the sentences, so that you can include the daughters' names in the first part. The comma (same as in Japanese) can set apart something in a sentence. When we are reading, and we reach a comma, there is a small pause, like this:
"I went shopping with my daughters [pause] who are named Kiko and Momo [pause] to the supermarket."
*** Instead of repeating "supermarket" it's better to say "there" (which works like こちらへ or あそこに)
ALSO, did you notice how you paused during your reading of the sentence:
When we are reading, and we reach a comma, there is a small pause, like this
説明の中の例です!
diary
Today (I took out the period) I went shoping with my daughters Kiko and Momo at the supermarket.I went pushing a stroller in Momo to the supermarket. ( A better way to say this sentence would be: I pushed Momo in a stroller to the supermarket.)
Kiko rode her tricycle to supermarket.
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