我的夏天的旅行
去年夏天我去中国在阳朔教着英文。我两年以前已经去了，所以我已经看过很多我想看见的东西，不过虽然什么没有新的看见的东西，我待在那里的时间不是浪费的，因为我这一次认识很多乡亲。为了我想提高一点我的中文，我跟她们只有说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。就是我们刚认识了，他们也让我感觉我是家人。他们都多好人和我离开以来，我们还互相发给信。我在中国那一次一边发现中国的文化，一边发现中国的朋友。
Last summer I was teaching English in Yangshuo in China. I had already been there the year before, so I had already seen a lot of the things that I wanted to see, however, even though there was nothing new to see, the time I spent there wasn't wasted because I met a lot of locals. We just spoke Chinese seeing as I wanted to improve but also because they didn't speak English. Even though we had just met, they made me feel like a member of the family. They are all wonderful people and since I left, we have been sending each other messages. On that trip I discovered Chinese culture and discovered some Chinese friends at the same time.
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我的夏天的旅行
去年夏天我去中国在阳朔教着英文。我两年以前已经去了，所以我已经看过很多我想看见的东西，不过虽然什么没有新的看见的东西，我待在那里的时间不是浪费的，因为我这一次认识很多乡亲。为了我想提高一点我的中文，我跟她们只有说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。就是我们刚认识了，他们也让我感觉我是家人。他们都多好人和我离开以来，我们还互相发给信。我在中国那一次一边发现中国的文化，一边发现中国的朋友。Last summer I was teaching English in Yangshuo in China. I had already been there the year before, so I had already seen a lot of the things that I wanted to see, however, even though there was nothing new to see, the time I spent there wasn't wasted because I met a lot of locals. We just spoke Chinese seeing as I wanted to improve but also because they didn't speak English. Even though we had just met, they made me feel like a member of the family. They are all wonderful people and since I left, we have been sending each other messages. On that trip I discovered Chinese culture and discovered some Chinese friends at the same time.
去年夏天我在中国阳朔教英语。我两年前已经去过那里，所以并没有看到什么让我感兴趣的新事物，但也不是没有收获。这一次，我认识了很多的乡亲。为了提高自身的中文水平，也因为他们不会说英文，我就只跟他们用中文交流，即便是我们刚认识，他们也当我是家人一样对待。我离开以后，还和他们保持着联系。这次的中国之行，我一边体验中国文化，一边结识中国朋友。
上边这一段是我根据你表达出来的意思重新写的。属于比较常用的中文表达方式吧。下边这段是在你的原文上边进行改动。
去年夏天我去中国在阳朔教着英文。我两年以前已经去了过这里，所以我已经看过很多我想看见的东西，不过虽然什么没有新的看见的东西发现，但我待在那里的时间也不是浪费的，因为我这一次认识很多乡亲。为了我想提高一点我的中文，并且他们也不会英文，我只有跟她们只有说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。就是即使我们刚认识了，他们也让我感觉我是家人。他们都多好人和我离开以来，他们中有好多人在我离开后还跟我我们还互相发给信信息。我在中国那一次，一边发现感受中国的文化，一边发现认识中国的朋友。
红色加删除线，是删掉的部分，绿色是新增加的部分。加粗加删除线的部分是有严重问题的地方。
1：去年夏天我去中国在阳朔教着英文。从语法来看，是没有什么错误，但不够简洁。
2：为了我想提高一点我的中文，我跟她们只有说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。 多条原因都放在结果前边，可以用“因为……并且……同时……所以……”这样的结构来书写。但不能描述了结果后，再在结果后边添加原因。
3：他们都多好人和我离开以来……这句话是本文最大的错误。根本无法从字面意思理解，只能从前后文来猜测它的意思。
4：一边发现中国的文化，一边发现中国的朋友。 这里不该用发现这个词汇。可以这样用，一边体会中国文化，一边结交中国朋友。
喜欢你这种提问的方式，你写的英文让我挺有收获。
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我的夏天的旅行 (also could be 我的夏天之旅)
去年夏天我去中国在中国阳朔教着英文。我两年以前已经去过了，所以(我)已经看过很多我想看见的东西，不过虽然没(有)什么没有新的东西看见的东西，不过我待在那里的时间(可)不是浪费的，因为我这一次认识了很多乡亲当地人。为了(因为)他们不能说英文，而且我想提高一点我的中文，(我)跟她他们只(有)说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。就算是我们只是刚认识了，他们也让我感觉我是他们的家人。他们都多好人很好，和自我离开以来，我们还互相发给訊息。我在中国那一次一边发现中国的文化，一边发现中国的朋友在这个旅行里，我同时探索中国文化与结交一些中国朋友。我的夏天旅行 (also could be 我的夏天之旅)
去年夏天我在中国阳朔教着英文。我两年前已经去过了，所以(我)已经看过很多我想看的东西，虽然没(有)什么新的东西看，不过我待在那里的时间(可)不是浪费的，因为我这一次认识了很多当地人。(因为)他们不能说英文，而且我想提高一点我的中文，(我)跟他们只(有)说中文。就算我们只是刚认识，他们也让我感觉我是他们的家人。他们都很好，自我离开以来，我们还互相发寄訊息。在这个旅行里，我同时探索中国文化与结交一些中国朋友。
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我的夏天的旅行
去年夏天我在我两年以前已经去了过那里，所以我已经看过很多我想看见的东西，不过虽然什么没有新的看见的东西新鲜事，我待在那里的时间不是也没有浪费时间的，因为我这一次认识很多乡亲。为了我想提高一点我的中文，我跟她们只有说中文，并且因为他们不能会说英文。虽然就是我们刚认识了不久，他们也让我感觉我是他们的家人。他们都多好人人很好，和我离开以来后，我们还互相发给短信。我在中国那一次段时光，一边发现中国的文化，一边发现认识中国的朋友。
（As a native speaker, I can understand what you are saying, but there are some details to notice.Great,keep writing!）
Last summer I was teaching English in Yangshuo in China. I had already been there the year before, so I had already seen a lot of the things that I wanted to see, however, even though there was nothing new to see, the time I spent there wasn't wasted because I met a lot of locals. We just spoke Chinese seeing as I wanted to improve but also because they didn't speak English. Even though we had just met, they made me feel like a member of the family. They are all wonderful people and since I left, we have been sending each other messages. On that trip I discovered Chinese culture and discovered some Chinese friends at the same time.
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我的夏天的旅行
去年夏天我去中国在阳朔在中国阳朔教着英文。我两年以前已经去了去过一次（阳朔）了，所以我已经看过很多我想看见的东西，有很多东西都是我曾见过的。不过虽然什么没有新的看见的新鲜的东西，我待在那里的时间不是浪费的我也不枉此行，因为我这一次认识了很多乡亲。为了我想提高一点我的中文，我跟她们只有说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。我和他们只能用中文交流，这有两方面的原因，一是我希望借此机会提高我的中文水平，二是他们不懂英文。就是尽管我们刚认识了，他们也让我感觉我是家人。他们都是很多好的人，和并且自从我离开以来，我们还互相发给信息。我在中国那一次我那次的中国之行，一边既发现了中国的文化，一边又发现结识中国的朋友。Last summer I was teaching English in Yangshuo in China. I had already been there the year before, so I had already seen a lot of the things that I wanted to see, however, even though there was nothing new to see, the time I spent there wasn't wasted because I met a lot of locals. We just spoke Chinese seeing as I wanted to improve but also because they didn't speak English. Even though we had just met, they made me feel like a member of the family. They are all wonderful people and since I left, we have been sending each other messages. On that trip I discovered Chinese culture and discovered some Chinese friends at the same time.
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我的夏天的旅行
去年夏天我（在中国阳朔）去中国在阳朔教着英文。（因为）我（两年前已经去过了）两年以前已经去了，所以我已经看过很多我想看见的东西，不过虽然什么没有新的看见的东西，（但或者但是）我待在那里的时间不是浪费的，因为我这一次认识很多乡亲。为了我想提高一点我的中文，我跟她们只能说中文，并且因为他们不能说英文。就是我们刚认识了，他们也让我感觉我是家人。他们都多好人和我离开以来，我们还互相发给信（或者说我们还有短信联系)。我在中国那一次一边发现中国的文化，一边发现中国的朋友（结交中国朋友）。虽然.....但是...... 因为......所以......
Last summer I was teaching English in Yangshuo in China. I had already been there the year before, so I had already seen a lot of the things that I wanted to see, however, even though there was nothing new to see, the time I spent there wasn't wasted because I met a lot of locals. We just spoke Chinese seeing as I wanted to improve but also because they didn't speak English. Even though we had just met, they made me feel like a member of the family. They are all wonderful people and since I left, we have been sending each other messages. On that trip I discovered Chinese culture and discovered some Chinese friends at the same time.
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