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Trying to translate Japanese wiki into English 6 Shawshank 5
English 6 Shawshank 5 → English 7 Shawshank 6After one month since Tommy’s death, Andy was released from the punishment chamber on condition that he helped to facilitate the illegal accounts again. Andy seemed strange, he had left a message which didn’t make sense for Red. At the stormy midnight, Red and his group assumed that Andy might be thinking of suicide and they can’t stop worrying about Andy.
Next morning, during roll call, it is revealed that Andy had gone from his cell. The warden and Hadley headed to Andy’s cell and found a big hole behind a poster which has been changing from Rita Hayworth’s one to Marilyn Monroe’s one to Raquel Welchy’s one. Andy has been digging the wall for about twenty years and succeeded in escaping in 1996. Andy disguised himself as Steven and withdrew Wander’s illegal savings from the bank. At the same time, he sent a bill of indictment to a newspaper company and he fled to Mexico. After that, Hadley was arrested and the warden committed suicide with a gun because of the bill of indictment from Andy.
Soon, Red gets parole but he couldn’t adjust himself to outside life. He trusted the message from Andy and headed toward Shiwatanejo in Mexico along the tragic path that Brook took. Once there, Red encountered Andy who lived a life of leisure and dignity at the coast. They embraced each other with pleasure.
This entire passage should be in past tense, stop using the present! English verbs change for tense, you cannot change tense halfway through a sentence.
Your articles were all fine.
'Warden' is not a name, so it should be 'the warden'.
You need to look up how to use 'with' properly, there were a few times where it should not be there.
トミーの死から1ヶ月後、アンディは再び不正経理を行うことを条件に懲罰房から出される。しかし、アンディの様子はどこかおかしく、レッドに要領を得ない伝言を残す。レッドら仲間達はアンディが自殺を考えていると疑い、嵐の晩に心配が募る。
翌朝の点呼の際、アンディが房から消えていることが発覚する。所長やハドリーもアンディの房に向かい、リタ・ヘイワースからマリリン・モンローへ、そしてラクエル・ウェルチへと代替わりしていたポスターの裏の壁に大穴が開いていることを見つけ出した。アンディは約20年間ロックハンマーで壁を掘り続け、ついに1966年、脱獄したのだった。アンディはスティーブンスに成りすまして所長の不正蓄財を引き出すと同時に告発状を新聞社へ送り、難なくメキシコへ逃亡する。そしてアンディの告発状によってハドリーは逮捕され、所長は拳銃自殺する。
間もなくレッドは服役40年目にしてようやく仮釈放されるが、ブルックスと同様に外の生活に順応できない。ブルックスと同じ悲劇への道を辿りかけるが、レッドはアンディの伝言を信じてメキシコのシワタネホへ向かう。そして、青海の海岸線で悠々自適の生活を送るアンディと再会し、喜びの抱擁を交わす。
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