First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello，everyone!My name is Wang Zhao,I come from Jinan,a beautiful city in China.Currently , I'm a senior student in Jinan University and my major is Environmental Science.I like delicious food,best film,and handsome man.Active,humorous,communicative is my personality.I am good at calligraphy,and gained many prizes.I'd like to make friends with more person.
My English well , but I love learning English.I wish to improve my English with your help.Thank you very much.
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello，everyone! My name is Wang Zhao,I cMy English, well,
1. You must use the word "the" to emphasize this particular university at Jinnan. Or you can say, "the University of Jinan" if that's the name of the university.
2. No one wants to eat bad tasting food. Good food means tastes good, the quality of food is good etc.
3. Active in what? in sports? in dancing? in singing? You need to explain yourself clearly to the reader because we don't know who you are and what your likes are.
4. This is redundant because what you are telling the reader are your personality and likes (hobbies etc).
5. Gained means that you got something. I'm sure you had win in competitions to get the prize.
6. Like in Chinese, 想 and 要. Want has more determination to learn and improve whereas wish comes across being not forceful enough.
I admire you that you can write with a brush and won prizes for calligraphy. Alas I cannot do so because I don't have the time, money or able to find the talented to teach me this art form.
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