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在中国的腐败 - Part 3 English: A new television series showing corrupt Chinese officials making confessions has proved a hit, officials say. More than 10 disgraced figures will appear over eight episodes of Always on the Road - a reference to the government's wide-ranging crackdown on corruption in the Communist Party. The first episode featured weeping, repentant men and the controversial burial of a tortoise. It has picked up millions of viewers online since it aired on Monday. "People everywhere are talking about Always on the Road," the Central Commission for Discipline Inspection, which investigates corruption and made the film with China Central Television, said in a statement. The documentary comes almost four years after President Xi Jinping promised to get tough on corruption in his party, vowing to go after powerful "tigers" as well as lowly "flies". However, critics say a lack of transparency around the purge means it has been an opportunity for Mr Xi to eliminate political enemies. Three of the so-called "tigers" accused of taking bribes and abusing power appear in the first episode of the documentary: Bai Enpei, a former party boss who received a life sentence, Zhou Benshun, an ex-party chief awaiting trial, and Li Chuncheng, a former deputy party boss sentenced to 13 years in jail. The story of Zhou went beyond simple corruption, revealing the former official had buried his tortoise with religious scrolls - despite this being against the law for party officials. 中文: 官员称,一个新的表达工人腐败中国官员的电视剧已经有佳评如潮。十多名丢人的人士会出现在“Always on the Road” 八个集中 - 参考政府在共产党内的彻底严厉打击腐败。第一个集设有哭的,悔过男人而且金龟的不伦理土葬。自周一广播以来它已经受到了一百多万的观众。CCDI在声称中称“全国都讨论‘Always on the Road'"。 CCDI检查腐败而且跟中国中央电视台一起摄制了。这个纪录片来习近平主席承诺严厉打击其党内的腐败而且发誓严厉打击有权的老虎以及底下的苍蝇近四年以后。 不过批评家水周围清党的缺乏透明度意味着成为习近平主席清除政府的敌人的一个机会。 三个控诉受贿和滥用职权的所谓“老虎”在纪录片的第一集都出现了:Bai Enpai, 一位受终身监禁的原党主管,Zhou Benshun, 一位正在等审判的前党主张还有Li Chuncheng, 一位盘有期徒刑13年的原党副主张。 (Extra) Zhou的故事只不是简单的腐败,也就是暴露原官员把他的金龟跟宗教拳埋没了。尽管对于官员这是一个非法的行为。在播放中三个人都供人了,但是路透社无法接触家人或律师发现这个供人是否愿意做了。

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在中国的腐败 - Part 3


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官方称(官员 means someone who is in a position of authority in an organization, 官方approved by the government or by someone in authority),一部(a fixed quantifier matches 电视剧(tv series)新的关于(many verbs in English can be transferred into propositions when it is translated into Chinese)腐败中国官员的电视剧已经有(Chinese does not focus much on its tense) 佳评如潮。十多名被人唾弃的官员将会出现在《永远在路上》(actually this series does have a Chinese name and please pay more attention to the punctuations)这部关于政府大范围打击腐败的8集电视连续剧 。第一个集讲述了一个哭泣并悔过的男人以及(而且 means moreover in English)对金龟的有争议的葬礼(here burial simply means 葬礼, it does not involve the way how the body is buried)。自周一上映(here in Chinese we use 上映 to describe the air of episodes or movies)以来它已经拥有了一百多万的观众。CCDI声称(this word can be directly used as a verb)“全国都讨论‘Always on the Road'"。 CCDI(中纪委)调查(investigate means 调查. the word 检查 is more likely to express the word ' check' )贪污腐败(these two words are often used together in Chinese),并且跟中国中央电视台一起摄制了这部电视剧(it would be better if the sentence is complemented)。这个纪录片上映于习近平主席承诺严厉打击其党内的腐败而且打击“老虎”和“苍蝇”(here tigers and flies have specific meanings. It comes from President Xi's speeches and referred to those corrupted officials both in high levels of the authority in the government and low levels. To express the ironic meaning, a quotation mark is a must )近四年以后。
不过批评家认为清洗行动缺乏透明度。这意味着它也是习主席清除政府内异己的一个机会。
三个控诉受贿和滥用职权的所谓的“老虎”在纪录片的第一集都出现了: 受终身监禁的原市委书记周本顺, 正在等审判的前党内高层周本顺,被判处13年有期徒刑的原党委副书记李春城
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周本顺的故事不只是简单的腐败。纪录片中他把乌龟和宗教卷轴一起埋入土中,虽然这样的行为也是违背党规的。(it is not a real low of China. The law here is more like a discipline for members of Communist Party, which do not allow its members to  go after religions. Communists are all atheists)

Generally speaking, you did a good job in the passage translation except some usage of words and organization of sentences. Besides, I think it would be much better if you can search for some details of the background knowledge so that you can have some knowledge about specific words like 'Tigers' or something like that. 

*I don't know whether I expressed my opinions clearly enough. If you have any questions you could contact me further to discuss about them.

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官方宣称,近期一部新上映的电视剧,关于中国贪腐官员佳评如潮。十多名羞耻的人全都会出现在“Always on the Road”,这部一共八集参考政府在共产党内的彻底严厉打击贪腐的电视剧里 。第一集描述一个后悔哭泣的人和其对于乌龟的不伦理土葬。自周一开播以来已经超过一百多万人的关注。 CCDI在声称中称“全国都讨论‘Always on the Road"。 CCDI打击贪腐并跟中国中央电视台一起拍摄这纪录片。此纪录片上映在近四年之后,当习近平主席主张严厉打击其党内的腐败,并誓言扫荡除了有权的老虎之外,还有底下的苍蝇。 不过批评家指出其扫荡缺乏透明度,仅给予习近平主席清除政府的敌人的一个机会。 三位被控诉受贿和滥用职权的所谓“老虎”在纪录片在第一集都出现了:Bai Enpai, 一位受终身监禁的前党务主管,Zhou Benshun, 一位正在等审判的前党书记,还有Li Chuncheng, 一位被判有期徒刑13年的前党副书记。 (Extra) Zhou的故事不只是简单的贪腐,同时揭露他埋葬乌龟与其手抄宗教经文。尽管对于官员,贪腐是一个非法的行为,并且在播放中三个人都供认了,但是路透社无法接触家人或律师进一步了解这个供认,是否是出自自我意愿来做的。

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