What do you want from your life?

The life every of us has its beggining and its end. > Just like with everything, our lives have a beginning and an ending.

And after the end nobody will give you a minute more. > When the end comes, no one will be able to have a minute more of it.

It is not a draft.> Life is not a rehearsal.

It is not a computer game where you can save and backup all your achievements. > It is not like those computer games we play whereby we can replay them whenever we want to, which also allow us save them in our computers at some point in the game when we have achieved something so we can play them again another day.

This is not a demo version.> Life is not a game.
You can not make your life longer, try it again or stop it for a while. It will be finished sometimes whether you want it or not. You can just make it shorter or keep her original length.

> Life is a continuous process of change; you cannot stop it or start it all over again. It will end at some point whether you like it or not.

You just have to carry on living it until the end comes.

I will stop here. This essay is rather hard for you to express in a meaningful way.

Your life is material from which you can sculpt something beautiful or make a dirty hut. This is a kind of substance from what his/her owner can create everything what he/she wants.
The only quiestion is: does the owner know what he wants from his/her life and does the owner know what he/she wants at all.

What do you want from your life?...

I think, there are some paragraphs need to be rephrased

Good try .. Hope that helps!

Good luck!