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Make Zongzi Yesterday is Sunday, so I had free time to make some Zongzi. Just as you know, the dragon boat festival is coming soon. We would always make and eat some Zongzi then. I made two flavors of Zongzi. One is salty. Another is sweet. The sweet Zongzi is more easy to make. I soaked glutinous rice for foue fours first. Then I mixed the rice with red dates. After wrapped them in the large bamboo leaves, I boiled them for half and one hours. Delicious sweet Zongzi was ready. Relatively speaking, the salty Zongzi is a little bit difficult. But never mind, everything is under my control.When soaked the glutinous rice, I should have added some condiment. Salt, soybean sauce, oyster sauce etc. meanwhile I also should marinate the some pork and Prepare some salty yolk. After four hours, I mixed the glutinous rice, marinated pork and salty yolk, and wrapped them up. I put them in the pressure cooker to burn half and an hour. The salty Zongzi was down. Look, this is the traditional Chinese snack. Do you wanna have a try?

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Make Zongzi

Yesterday was Sunday, so I had free time to make some Zongzi. As you probably know, the dragon boat festival is coming soon. We always make Zongzi to eat then.
I made two flavors of Zongzi. One was salty. The other was sweet.  (You really need to have past tense as making them was past tense.  You could also write "I make" and then use present tense for the flavours.  As there are only two flavours you need to write "the other" not "another".  If you had made more than two flavours, the "another" would be correct)  The sweet Zongzi is  are easier to make. I soaked glutinous rice for four hours (That is 四 个小时  isn't it) first. Then I mixed the rice with red dates. After I had wrapped (you can write either "after wrapping" or "after I had wrapped)  them in the large bamboo leaves, I boiled them for half and one one and a half hours. Delicious sweet Zongzi was were ready.  (It would be even more English to write "My delicious sweet Zongzi".    I've got a question here, are your Zongzi a number of separate dumplings or a single large cake?  If it's a single item then your verbs are correct. If it's a number of separate items you need your verbs to be plural.  I have to ask because I can't find out from my rather small dictionary.  I've seen the dumpling/dragon boat festival down in Singapore and Malaysia where it was separate dumplings.  Here's another question for you is Nan Yang 南痒 the general term you yourself would use for that part of the world?)
Relatively speaking, the salty Zongzi is a little bit more difficult. But never mind, everything is under my control.When I soaked the glutinous rice, I should have added some condiment: salt, soybean sauce, oyster sauce etc.  Meanwhile I also should marinated  the some pork and prepared some salty yolk. (Here too you need to use the same tense throughout.)
After four hours, I mixed the glutinous rice, marinated pork and salty yolk, and wrapped them up. I put them in the pressure cooker to burn  cook for one and half hours. The salty Zongzi was down done.

Look, this is the  (the definite article isn't quite right here. You could use 'a' the indefinite article.  Or you could make it more personal by writing 'our')   traditional Chinese snack. Do you wanna have a try?   ( 'wanna' is a recognized slang equivalent for 'want to' and it's grammatically correct as you have used it.  But, you've been writing in a different style so the slang doesn't really fit in thathat sentence.  If you want to end in a jokey way you could certainly end with 'Wanna try?' though that is still a bit of a misfit.  May I suggest a slightly different last sentence  "Why don't you have a try?") 

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I did enjoy this essay.  See  

http://www.pbase.com/hhmrogers/image/105017487/original

http://www.pbase.com/hhmrogers/image/141524126

for the Singapore festive a few years ago.

All the best,  Henry 

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Make Zongzi

Yesterday was Sunday so I had free time to make some Zongzi. Just as you might know, the dragon boat festival was coming soon. We would always make and eat some Zongzi then.
I made two flavors of Zongzi. One was salty. The other one was sweet. The sweet Zongzi was easier to make. At first, I soaked glutinous rice for four hours (or you can say: I Iet the rice soak for four hours). Then I mixed the rice with red dates. After that, I wrapped them in large bamboo leaves and boiled them for half and one hours an hour and a half . Delicious sweet Zongzi were ready.
Relatively speaking, the salty Zongzi were (there were many of them, weren't there? then it shoul be plural) a little bit difficult to make. But never mind, everything was under my control. When I soaked the glutinous rice, I added some condiments (was it a simultaneous process? you soaked the rice and added condiments at the same time, right? then the past simple form is more preferable) such as salt, soybean sauce, oyster sauce etc. Meanwhile, I was also supposed to marinate some pork and prepare some salty yolks.
After four hours I mixed the glutinous rice, the marinated pork and the salty yolks and I wrapped them up. I put them in the pressure cooker to burn for half and an hour an hour and a half. The salty Zongzi were down(-? Do you mean the bottom of the frying pan? ).
Look, this is a traditional Chinese snack. Do you wanna have a try?

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