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Diary May 7th Sunday I got up at 9 am.I slept well.My husband made breakfast.His cooking is so good.After breakfast,he made me coffee.He likes coffee. I felt unwell around noon,went to bed again.I slept a lot today and feel much better. In the evening,I went to shopping.I made dinner,beef and burdock dishes and potato dishes.They were easy and tasty.I put the pictures of the dishes on instagram.After I finished taking a bath,I did 100 sit-ups.I am going to sleep soon. >> I got up at 9 am and I slept well. My husband made breakfast. His cooking is so good, and after breakfast he made me coffee, which he really likes.I felt unwell around noon, so I went to bed again. I have slept a lot today so I feel much better. In the evening I went shopping and then I made dinner. I made beef and burdock dishes and potato dishes, which were easy to make and also tasty. I put the pictures of the dishes on Instagram. I took a bath before doing 100 sit-ups. I am going to sleep soon.

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Diary: May 7th, Sunday

I got up at 9 am. I slept well. My husband made breakfast. His cooking is so good. After breakfast, he made me coffee. He likes coffee. I felt unwell around noon, and went to bed again. I slept a lot today and feel much better.
In the evening, I went to shopping. I made dinner: beef and burdock dishes and potato dishes. They were easy and tasty. I put the pictures of the dishes on instagram. After I finished taking a bath, I did 100 sit-ups. I am going to sleep soon.


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Hi Mari,

This was a great entry, well done. There were very few things to change! The biggest changes were to add spaces after punctuation marks, and to use colons in places where you listed things (like what you made for dinner).

Let me know if you have any questions!

Best,

Julie

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Hi there, here are my corrections to your writing. I hope this is useful, let me know if you have any questions!

The writing is really good, but the next level is to start joining sentences together to help the writing flow better.  A good way to join some sentences together is to use some phrases I have used in the corrections:

Diary, May 7th Sunday May 7th

I got up at 9 am and (joins two short sentences to help it flow)I slept well. (always a space after a full-stop) My husband made breakfast. His cooking is so good, (joins two short sentences to help it flow)and after breakfast (no comma needed) he made me coffee, which he really likes (joins two short sentences to help it flow)He likes coffee. I felt unwell around noon, so I (joins two short sentences to help it flow)went to bed again. (always a space after a full-stop)  I have slept a lot today so I feel much better.

In the evening (no comma needed) I went to shopping and then (joins two short sentences to help it flow)I made dinner.  I made beef and burdock dishes and potato dishes, which (joins two short sentences to help it flow).They were easy to make and also tasty.  I put the pictures of the dishes on Instagram.  After I finished taking took a bath before doing(joins two short sentences to help it flow)I did 100 sit-ups. I am going to sleep soon.


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