Growing Migration in Urban Areas - implications for Rural Communities

I am currently graduating from high school and will have to write an essay about 250 words in/for my final exam.
I would like to improve my writing skills, therefore I'm looking forward to every correction and/or tips on how to improve my writing. Thank you very much!


Urbanization (your spelling wasn't wrong, it's just the British spelling - it's always -ization in American English and -isation in British English) symbolizes the high migration to urban areas rather than living in the country. It is a long term process that started in the 18th century. The population moved to the cities with the hope of finding better jobs during the Industrial Age. Since then, urbanized society has increased steadily and the implications for rural communities are appalling.

First, the majority of the younger generations have become urban. The elderly, however, remain in the rural areas, which changes the daily life and infrastructure for their benefit. For instance, the public transportation system is based on the needs of the elderly, which makes catching a bus after a night out partying complicated. Furthermore, the weekly church service is filled with seniors and attendance is getting lower because the older people are dying off ("to become extinct" is usually only reserved for animal species, e.g., the dinosaurs went extinct.)

Moreover, the increasingly urbanized society causes a loss of rural traditions. The declining rural population fails to observe traditional beliefs and events. In my village there had been a frequently used advertising pillar (don't know what you mean here), however nowadays the event rate has decreased (I've changed "decreased" to "has decreased" because the perfect tense implies an ongoing action in the past, as opposed to a past action taking place at one point in time like the preterite (simple past)) to a minimum. Only the two main festivals, fun fair and Christmas market, still exist.

Finally, the growing emigration from rural areas causes a vicious cycle. The remaining villages own inadequate infrastructure, less shops and social life. Consequently, rural immigration gets less attractive and the population density is declining further. Fewer residents leads to closing shops and complicates a proper supply chain.

In conclusion, urbanization is an extant problem that must be paid attention to. There has been no solution for 200 years and none is in sight for the future.