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India wakes up populist and reactionary feelings Demagogy, xenophobia, religion. Narendra Modi has stirred up the patriotic pride, setting himself against Islam and the West. India went through another political upheaval in mid-March, the second one after Narendra Modi’s victory in 2014. Bharatiya Janata Party, nationalist as well as traditionalist party, already in charge in Delhi, has triumphally won the administrative elections in five states, with a unique outcome. Particularly, in Uttar Pradesh, the most crowed Indian state, and the most important one with respect to its strategical location as well as image, it had never occurred that a party would have an overwhelming victory with the majority: it obtained almost 40% of votes and 80% of the seats, lagging behind the Indian National Congress party that considered Uttar Pradesh its stronghold. According to some analysts, the victory should not be ascribed completely to BJP’s worthiness, but to the opposition’s ineptitude, which was unable to hire trustworthy candidates. Nevertheless, the outcome doesn’t change. The Indian National Congress party reached its lowest level, communists disappeared and also the other opposition parties don’t exist anymore.

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India wakes up populist and reactionary feelings

Demagogy, xenophobia, religion. Narendra Modi has stirred up the patriotic pride, setting himself against Islam and the West.
India went through another political upheaval in mid-March, the second one after Narendra Modi’s victory in 2014. The Bharatiya Janata Party, a nationalist as well as traditionalist party and already in charge in Delhi, has triumphally won the administrative elections in five states, with a unique outcome. Particularly, in Uttar Pradesh, the most crowed Indian state  and the most important one with respect to its strategical location as well as and image, it had never occurred  people never expected that a party would have an overwhelming victory with the majority. In fact, the party obtained almost 40% of votes and 80% of the seats, lagging behind the Indian National Congress party that considered Uttar Pradesh its stronghold.

According to some analysts, the victory should not be ascribed completely to BJP’s worthiness  but to the opposition’s ineptitude, which as it was unable to hire attract [?] trustworthy candidates. Nevertheless, the outcome doesn’t change. The Indian National Congress party reached its lowest level, communists disappeared, and also the other opposition parties don’t exist anymore.
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Hi Alessio, very interesting article!! Three quick things: 1) not crowed, but crowded -- "crowded Indian state" 2) I think you want the adverb triumphantly rather than triumphally -- "has triumphantly won", or as a verb -- "has triumphed" 3) also, as you probably know, formal essays in English should generally be written without contractions -- eg. "does not", rather than "doesn't" cordiali!

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