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Japanese Travel Diary: Day 2 Japan diary: Day 2 I grumble a lot about my Sony phone (no hate guys), but one thing that's always handy is a 23mp camera and a 4k display, because today I laid my eyes upon some of the most beautiful sights I've seen in 20 years. Roppongi, Asakusa, Shinjuku, Meguro-kawa then The Imperial Palace. Such was the plan, but since genius me didn't know the Palace Gardens closed at 4 and Meguro-kawa was not, in fact, at Meguro station, I only managed to really get around the remaining three places. But, it may already be enough. As the cool, summer breeze coaxed the Sakura petals off their branches and cascaded onto the floor below, the morning sun around Roppongi danced through the cracks and crevasses of the Sakura trees, a sight that, up till now was only possible in movies and post cards and too far to touch, became a reality. The Japanese are famous for their Sakura for a reason, going so far as to center festivities and matsuri's around them. There's something about the crisp, summer sun, blended with the atmosphere of people young and old out for Hanami, combined with the magnificent shade of pink that covered the parks of Tokyo, that come together to form this beautiful, unforgettable season that attracts visitors from every corner of the globe. 次:北海道。

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I really only made corrections to help the flow of your piece. You're grammar in general was very good. One thing though, you never want to start a sentence with the word "but". Your last sentence I broke into two sentences, because it began to run on.
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Japanese Travel Diary: Day 2

Japan diary: Day 2

I grumble a lot about my Sony phone (no hate guys), but one thing that's always handy is a 23mp camera and a 4k display, because today I laid my eyes upon some of the most beautiful sights I've seen in 20 years.

Roppongi, Asakusa, Shinjuku, Meguro-kawa, and The Imperial Palace, such was the plan. Since genius me didn't know the Palace Gardens closed at 4, and Meguro-kawa was not, in fact, at Meguro station, I only managed to really get around the remaining three places.

It may have been enough. As the cool, summer breeze coaxed the Sakura petals off their branches and cascaded onto the floor below, the morning sun around Roppongi danced through the cracks and crevasses of the Sakura trees. A sight that up till now, was only possible in movies and post cards. Something that before was too far to touch, became a reality.

The Japanese are famous for their Sakura for a reason, going so far as to center festivities and matsuri's around them. There's something about the crisp, summer sun, blended with the atmosphere of people young and old out for Hanami.  This, combined with the magnificent shade of pink that covered the parks of Tokyo, come together to form this beautiful, unforgettable season that attracts visitors from every corner of the globe.

次:北海道。

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