A writing practice~ Please help me change the simple words to essay words. Thank you!!
Furthermore, establishing the ability to plan and organize improves young children's guiding skill. The leader of a group should have a great ability to plan and organize. If young children can establish the organizing ability as early as possible, they could feel frequently when they are in a group project. I still can remember when I was doing group projects in high school, we chose the group leader based on whether the person can make clearly plan or not. Or if we need to choose a new club president, the person who have the best ability to plan and organize is always the winner. The ability to plan and organize not only improves people's leading skills, but also provides people a chance that improve their social skills and communication skills.
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I always use great, need, ... or some simple words when I was writing an essay... But I sometimes don't know how to change it to a better way.
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A writing practice~ Please help me change the simple words to essay words. Thank you!!
Furthermore Evidence shows that establishing developing the ability to plan and organize improves young children's guiding skill leadership skills. The leader of a group should have a great ability to plan and organize. If young children can establish the their organizing abilities as early as possible, they could feel frequently confident when they are in a group project. I still can remember when I was doing group projects in high school, we chose the group leader based on whether the person can make clearly plan or not could plan well or not. Or if we need to choose a new club president, the person who have has the best ability to plan and organize is always the winner. The ability to plan and organize not only improves people's leading leadership skills, but also provides people a chance that to improve their social skills and communication skills.--------------------------------------------------------
I always use great, need, ... or some simple words when I was writing an essay... But I sometimes don't know how to change it to a better way.
(It is unusual to start your argument with 'furthermore', this word is like 而且 or 再説 in Chinese, it should be used when elaborating on something you have already said)
(The word 'establishing' is OK, but I think 'developing' sounds more natural here)
(I am not sure what you meant withe the word 'frequently', but the sentence did not make sense so I changed it to 'confident'. I hope I have not misunderstood what you wanted to say!)
This essay is very good! Don't worry about using simple words, you should only write with words you are familiar with. You can read more in English to become more familiar with different ways of expressing the same thought, then gradually you can start writing with words you have read many times. This language is hard to practice because it is a bit different than spoken language. But written English and spoken English are not too different. It is OK to sometimes use simple language in an essay :)
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A writing practice~ Please help me change the simple words to essay words. Thank you!!
Furthermore, establishing the ability to plan and organize improves young children's guiding leadership skill. The leader of a group should have a great strong ability to plan and organize. If young children can establish organizing ability as early as possible, they would feel frequently confident (?)when they are in a group project. I still can remember when I was doing group projects in high school, we chose the group leader based on whether the person can was able make clear plans or not. Or if we needed to choose a new club president, the person who have had the best ability to plan and organize was always the winner. The ability to plan and organize not only improves people's leadingership skills, but also provides people a chance that to improve their social skills and communication skills.--------------------------------------------------------
I always use great, need, ... or some simple words when I was writing an essay... But I sometimes don't know how to change it to a better way.
Good job. You do not have to use "big" words in an essay. Just try to avoid using casual conversation type language. The most important thing is to make your essay understandable. The trend in English writing is to write clearly, using simple words is ok.
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