Short essay Nowadays, mobile phones have become a part of our life and we use them every often. Many years ago we just used them to phone, however, today, we can use them to surf the Net, we can speak

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Short essay Nowadays, mobile phones have become a part of our life and we use them every often. Many years ago we just used them to phone, however, today, we can use them to surf the Net, we can speak with my friends on different social networking websites, make photos, write e-mail or sms and so on. However, mobile phones there are some disadvantages, too. If you would like to relax and stay far away from our work then mobile phones can cause problem if we do not like to turning off them because we are available so anybody can distrupt you. One of the most greatest andvantages of using a phone is that we can keep in contact with our family and friends mainly if we live far from them. We can keep in touch via Skype, WhatsApp, or Facebook. Thank to these phone applications, the contact is not interrupted and we can be informed. Since mobile phones are used for many things, many peolpe feel bad without a phone and they fell lost, mainly if they are an unknown city or they are in a dangerous situation. To sum up mobile phones are very useful if we would like to keep contact each other however excessive using mobile phones can cause deterioration of relations if we do not pay attention enough time each other.

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Short essay

Nowadays, mobile phones have become a part of our life and we use them every often.

("Nowadays" implies the present, so you would either have to change to present tense or use another adverb here (like "recently") and keep present tense).

Many years ago we just used them to phone m_____ phone c_____,.

hHowever, today, we can use them to surf the Net, we can speak with my friends on different social networking websites,make _______ photos, write e-mail_ or and sms text messages and so on.

However, mobile phones there are __________ some disadvantages, too.

If you would like to relax and stay far away from our work then mobile phones can cause problem if we do not like to turning off them because we are available so anybody can distrupt you.

(Try this sentence again. Actually, make two or three sentences here. Make it simpler and stick with "you" or "we", not both.)

One of the most greatest andvantages (spelling) of using a phone is that we can keep in contact with our family and friends mainly ____________ if we live far from them.

We can keep in touch via Skype, WhatsApp, or Facebook. Thank_ to these phone applications, the contact is not interrupted and we can be informed (stay up to date?).

(Not sure what you mean by "the contact is not..."). Try it again!

Since mobile phones are used for many things, many peolpe (spelling) feel bad without a phone and they fell (spelling) lost, mainly _________ if they are __ an unknown city or they are in a dangerous situation.

To sum up, mobile phones are very useful if we would like to keep ___ contact _____ each other. However, excessive using use of mobile phones can cause _ deterioration of relationships if we do not pay enough attention time __ each other.

Hi Elliot! Thank you for your help! I corrected the mistakes. Recently, mobile phones have become a part of our life and we use them every often. Many years ago we just used them to make phone calls, however, today, we can use them to surf the Net, speak with friends on social networking websites, take photos, write e-mails and text messages and so on. However, mobile phones have some disadvantages, too. If you would like to relax and stay far away from your work then mobile phones can cause problem if you do not like to turning off them because you are available so anybody can distrupt you. One of the most greatest advantages of using a phone is that we can keep in contact with our family and friends especially if we live far from them. We can keep in touch via Skype, WhatsApp, or Facebook. Thanks to these phone applications, the relation is not interrupted and we can stay up to date. Since mobile phones are used for many things, many people feel bad without a phone and they feel lost, especially if they are in an unknown city or in a dangerous situation. To sum up, mobile phones are very useful if we would like to keep in contact to each other. However, excessive use of mobile phones can cause the deterioration of relationships if we do not pay enough attention to each other.

Hi Attila. I made some notes on things you can correct on your essay yourself (I made some small corrections too). I think you will learn more if you correct your own mistakes instead of somebody doing it for you. What do you think? I look forward to your corrected essay. Good luck!

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