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My favorite actor HuGe is one of famous actors in China .He was born in Shanghai. He is thirty five years old.He has 75kg and he is 185cm.HuGe is the most handsome in my mind.He is a charming man and an unusual actor. When he got his fame because he starred in 'The Legend of Sword and Fairy' but he suffered terrible accidents.This accident had a great effect on his life and work. His face was badly hurt, for an actor ,appearence is very important.Therefore,he performed many operations to recover his appearence.But there a big scar under his eye.However,he didin't surrender to frustration and he put more attention in acting. God helps those who help themselves,he finally made a great success in 2015. 2015 was his havest year.Especially,he satrred in 'nirvana' in fire ,he received recognition on from the masses.When everyone considered he was going to do more, but he announced he would go to study in America.As a his fan, I will suport his decision.I am looking forward to he become better.I love HuGe.

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HuGe is one of the famous actors in China . He was born in Shanghai. He is thirty five years old. He has weighs 75kg and he is 185cm tall. HuGe is the most handsome person  in my mind. He is a charming man and an unusual actor.  When he got his He rose to fame because he starred in 'The Legend of Sword and Fairy',  but he suffered a terrible accidents. This accident had a great effect on his life and work. His face was badly hurt. For an actor, appearence  Appearance is very important. Therefore, he performed many operations to recover his appearence appearance. But Despite this, there was a big scar under his eye. However, he didin't didn't surrender to frustration (good expression! 加分!)   and he paid  more attention in into acting.
God helps those who help themselves, (再加分!) and he finally made a found great success in 2015. 2015 was his havest  greatest year. Especially when he satrred in 'nirvana' in fire ,he received recognition on from the masses.(加分!)Just when everyone considered thought he was going to do more, but he announced that he would go to study in America.As a his fan, I will support his decision.I am looking forward to him become better. I love HuGe.


Orange corrections - Fundamental errors. Pay attention to these! 

Green corrections - Minor mistakes, but there are better ways to write these sentences :) 


Interesting article! 


Some points to remember: 

Unlike Chinese, English grammar needs a space after every punctuation! 要记得,用英文是要在每个标点符号后面加个空格的哦!

Very good use of expressions, keep it up! 英文成语用得好!很恰当!

Writing is about taking something you love and sharing your emotions and feelings with them, this is a very good example :) Keep writing! 写作就是一个把你自己对某个题目的感想和感受和大家分享,而这一个让大家知道你多喜欢HuGe!要继续写哦!

I enjoyed reading your article! 

Keep Writing, 

Marcus

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