30 days of writing in English: Day 3
My family tree
My family is very big. I have a great legacy of my ancestors. I had the great opportunity to meet my paternal great-grandmother. Her name was Blasina and she was a tender, lovers and delicate woman. Conversely, my grandmothers were very strong women. I did not meet my grandfathers.
My father was a strong and brave man. He liked photography and listening to classical music. My mom was a great woman. Just like my father, she was strong and brave and she loved all kinds of music. She sang and danced very well.
I have many great experiences with my brothers and sisters. I have three brothers and four sisters. They are very intelligent, professionals and talented. Just like our parents, we all love music: to sing, to dance and to play musical instruments.
As well, I have the wonderful mission to pass this legacy to my children. Both, have much for their family legacy: they´re strong and brave like my parents and my grandmothers, they are also loving as my great-grandmother and they are intelligent and music’s lovers, like their grandparents, their uncles and aunts...And of course: like me, their mom....
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30 days of writing in English: Day 3
My family treeMy family is very big. I have a great legacy from of my ancestors. I had the great opportunity of meeting my paternal great-grandmother. Her name was Blasina and she was a tender, lovers loving, and delicate woman. Conversely, my grandmothers were very strong women. I did not meet my grandfathers.
My father was a strong and brave man. He liked photography and listening to classical music. My mom was a great woman. Just like my father, she was strong and brave and she loved all kinds of music. She sang and danced very well.
I have many great experiences with my brothers and sisters. I have three brothers and four sisters. They are very intelligent, professional, and talented. Just like our parents, we all love music. We love to sing, to dance and to play musical instruments.
As well, Also, I have the wonderful mission to pass this legacy to my children. Both have much for from their family legacy: they´re strong and brave like my parents and my grandmothers, they are also loving as like my great-grandmother, and they are intelligent and music’s lovers, like their grandparents, their uncles, and aunts...And of course, like me, their mom....
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30 days of writing in English: Day 3
My family treeMy family is very big. I have a great legacy of my ancestors. I had the great opportunity to meet my paternal great-grandmother. Her name was Blasina and she was a tender, lovers loving and delicate woman. Conversely, my grandmothers were very strong women. I did not meet my grandfathers.
My father was a strong and brave man. He liked photography and listening to classical music. My mom was a great woman. Just like my father, she was strong and brave and she loved all kinds of music. She sang and danced very well.
I have many great experiences with my brothers and sisters. I have three brothers and four sisters. They are very intelligent, professionals and talented. Just like our parents, we all love music: to sing, to dance and to play musical instruments.
As well, I have the wonderful mission to pass this legacy to my children. Both, have much for their family legacy: they´re strong and brave like my parents and my grandmothers, they are also loving as my great-grandmother and they are intelligent and are music’s lovers, like their grandparents, their uncles and aunts...And of course: like me, their mom....
This is excellent writing, very few mistakes, well done! Charlotte
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