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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Recently, education is the important part of our life. Almost People tend to consider the job career and how to get qualifications as purpose of university education, while other people think that university education dose not aim to get better job and it is more important to create the learn human relationship with classmate or professor, which lead to make knowledge for living in society. There are both types of perspectives as benefits of acquiring university education. In this essay, I will discuss some of them. Firstly, as for getting better jobs, student sometimes uses university lank level to get better job. If student graduate form very famous university, many company remark this person to hire and consider to assign high grade position in their work. If university’s education can lead to make resources for job career since they are enrolled at university, it is good opportunity to get better job. However, when student graduate from university, they are going to work in the company. Students also have to learn many educated things for adopting society. In this view point, university’s education provides us with many curriculums which are not useful for getting better job. In Japan, university imposes on volunteer activity to learn moral responsibilities. I think this conducts affect to create good notion for adopt many thing in the future and student can become a much wider role to create benefits in society. In conclusion, some people believe that university study brings much wider benefits for the students besides getting better jobs, but others disagree with it. In my point of view, I do agree that the aim of studying in the university should not be only for getting jobs. I think university’s education is training place for learning sophisticated knowledge which is utilize for creating (or being) good personality.

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In addition to Daiさん's corrections:


"...while other people think that university education dose not aim to get better job should not be seen only as a means to get a better job" or "is not just for getting a better job" or "while other people think that one should not aim only for a better job in studying at a university" "while other people think that while studying at a university, one should not aim only for a better job but instead it is more important to cultivate human relationships""does not serve to get a better job" means it doesn't help to get a better job, which isn't the case.
"Firstly, as for getting better jobs, students sometimes..."
"consider this person to hire for a high grade position" ("consider hiring this person for a high grade position" is more natural)


"things for adapting to society"

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days, education is an important part of our lives. Almost all people tend to consider their career and how to get qualifications as the purpose of university education, while other people think that university education does not serve to get a better job, and it is more important to create the learn human relationships with classmates and professors, which lead to greater knowledge for living in society. Both types of perspectives reveal benefits of acquiring university education. In this essay, I will discuss some of them.

Firstly, as for getting better jobs, student sometimes use their university rank level to get a better job. If a student graduates from a very famous university, many companies will consider this person to hire for a high grade position in their work. If a university education provides better career opportunities, then it is probably worth it for this alone. 

However, when students graduate from university, they are going to work in a company. Students also have to learn many educated things for adopting to society. In this view point, university’s  education provides us with many curriculums which are not useful for getting a better job. In Japan, university imposes on volunteer activities on students to learn moral responsibilities. I think this prepares students well for the future and has a much wider benefit to society.

In conclusion, some people believe that university study brings much wider benefits to students besides getting better jobs, but others disagree with this. In my opinion, I do agree that the aim of studying in at university should not be only for getting jobs. I think university’s education is a  training place for learning sophisticated knowledge which is utilised for creating (or developing) a better personality.


Nice essay well done! The structure is very good, please be careful to always use a/the and plurals. Otherwise, very nice!

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