Who Are Really Losers I really got very angry when my roommates showed their judgement towards one person who had tried hard to study but failed to be accepted to an ideal college. How I wished to ask

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Who Are Really Losers I really got very angry when my roommates showed their judgement towards one person who had tried hard to study but failed to be accepted to an ideal college. How I wished to ask them why they couldn't respect others' effort! But actually I did nothing even if I hated my cowardly non-response. I knew it wasn't easy to change others' rooted opinions and I didn't want to argue with them. So I just walked away quietly without even saying goodbye to them. Sometimes I cannot stand my roommates and I have no desire to talk with them about anything because they are always make no effort to improve themselves while they easily look down others' effort if those people don't live well now! They said those people are losers, but who are really losers? I feel sorry for writing such mean and unkind words.

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Who Are Really Losers

I knew I really got very angry when my roommates showed their judgement towards one person who had tried hard to study but failed to be accepted to an ideal college. How I wished to ask them why they couldn't respect others' effort! But actually I did nothing even if I hated my cowardly non-response. I knew it wasn't easy to change others' rooted opinions and I didn't want to argue with them. So I just walked away quietly without even saying goodbye to them.
Sometimes I cannot stand my roommates and I have no desire to talk with them about anything because they are always lazy while they easily look down others' effort if those people don't live well now! They said those people are losers, but who are really losers?
I feel sorry for writing such mean and unkind words.

When speaking in a negative sense, it's more common to use the word "anything". Other examples could be "I don't want anything for breakfast", "I didn't say anything to her" or "I can't do anything". "Something" is more commonly seen in a positive sense. "I saw something yesterday" or "I want to talk to you about something". There are a few exceptions, but following this rule will help you sound more natural.

In general, well done. Your correct use of the apostrophe for the plural possesive noun would put many native English speakers to shame! That's a tricky one.

Cheers! :)

Who Are Really Losers

I clearly knew that I got very angry when my roommates showed their scorn towards one person who had endeavored in studying but he failed in entering an ideal college. [You should say: I got very angry when my roommates showed contempt for a person who didn't get accepted into a top-tier university despite his relentless studying. Note: You should not start with the phrase “I clear knew” because naturally, you would clearly know your feelings. However, if you had written, "My roommates clearly knew that I got angry ...", then that would make more sense.]

How I wished to ask them why they cannot respect others' effort! [How I wanted to ask them why couldn't they recognize/acknowledge how hard he worked.]

And I hatred my cowardice resulted in I didn't say any apolitical words for that person, I just walked away quietly even without saying goodbye to them. [I hated my cowardly non-response. Was I afraid of being politically incorrect? Whatever the reason, I just quietly walked away with my head between my legs.] Note: The English phrase "sb head between their legs" means the person is frightened or cowardly or threatened or humiliated. Sometimes, asking questions of the reader is a good way to help them understand your writing.

Sometimes I cannot stand my roommates and I have no desire in talking about something with them because they are always lazy while they easily look down others' effort if those person don't live well now! [Sometimes, I can't stand my roommates because they make no effort to understand others and they are quick to look down on people who are not at "their level".]

They said those person are losers, but who are really losers? [They often call others losers, but I think they should look in the mirror and see whom the real losers are.]

I feel sorry for writing such mean and unkind words. [I hate writing such mean and unkind words but they deserve it.]

People Who Are Really Losers

I clearly knew that I got very angry when my roommates showed their scorn judgement (You can say 'scorn,' but it sounds very formal. I think 'judgement is more appropriate for your context.) towards one person who had endeavored in tried studying but he failed in entering to be accepted to an ideal college. How I wished to ask them why they cannot did not respect others' effort! And I hatred In my cowardice, resulted in I didn't say any apolitical words stand up (I'm not entirely sure if that's what you meant) for that person. I just walked away quietly even without even saying goodbye to them.
Sometimes I cannot stand my roommates and I have no desire in to talking about something with them about something, (your word choice it right, but you just need to reorder them) because they are always lazy; meanwhile they easily looking down others' effort if those that person doesn't live well now! They said those person people are losers, but who are the really losers?
I feel sorry for writing such mean and unkind words.

Nice work! I hope this story is fictions, and your roommates aren't actually awful. Good luck!

Who Are Really Losers

I clearly knew that I got very angry when my roommates showed their scorn towards one person who had endeavored in studying but had failed in entering to get into an ideal college. How I wished to ask them why they cannot respect others' effort! And I hatred my cowardice resulted in that I didn't say any apolitical words for that person, I just walked away quietly even without without even saying goodbye to them.
Sometimes I cannot stand my roommates and I have no desire in talking to talk about someanything with them because they are always lazy while they easily look down others' effort if those people don't live well now! They say those peopleperson are losers, but who are really losers?
I feel sorry for writing such mean and unkind words.

You're right to be angry, Willow!

Blue parts:

1 - Maybe, "I knew I was really angry when..."

2 - "...who had tried hard to study"

3. Here, it's better to keep it in past tense, as 'quoted' text: "why they couldn't respect"

4. I'm not sure what you mean. You were too afraid to speak up? You were too angry and afraid to speak up?

5. Apolitical...what do you mean here? You mean words in their defense?

6. By "don't live well now," do you mean people who are experiencing failure? Or people who are suffering?

Yes, it confuses me a lot!

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