IELTS. WRITING PART 1. A CENTRAL HEATING SYSTEM On the diagramm we can see how a central heating system in a house is organised. There are some key features which will be described in this review.

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IELTS. WRITING PART 1. A CENTRAL HEATING SYSTEM On the diagramm we can see how a central heating system in a house is organised. There are some key features which will be described in this review. First of all, cold water enters to the house from the water supply system and after it has two ways for further motion. One of the ways is to go to the water tank, which is need to fill the storage tank. And the other way is to go directly to the storage tank and after it goes to taps or boiler. In a individual houses two types of boiler are often used - working on gas or working on oil. Usage of boiler is a good way to have a hot water in a house, which is essentially needed not only for washing hands, but also for heat up the radiators, which can rise the interior temperature and make living in this house more comfortable. We can see that a boiler locates near the pump, which is the engine of this system, the main task of which is to make the water flow through the pipes. Pipes with different diametres are involving in a process of heating the house - the further from the point of cold water entrance to the house the smaller the diametres of pipe is. Also pipes have different functions, which depend on a possition they takes. For example, in the water tank has two levels of pipe location - one of the pipes is lower, other is higher and exactly this pipe is used not only to transfer water, but also in emergency case when the water tank is overflowed.

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Olga,

Your writing is actually quite good, so please don't be disappointed by the deletions. It's what we call tough love :-)

IELTS Writing Part 1 is descriptive, based only on what you can see. No opinions or adding in information that the diagram doesn't show. Also no unnecessary waffle (sentences used to increase the word count that don't add any useful information).

This is one of the main reasons students get a bad mark in Part 1 - they don't answer the question in the way they are supposed to. Yes, this means that Part 1 can seem boring and mechanical without any creativity, but exams are all about following instructions. You get a chance to be creative in Part 2.

From now on, if you keep asking yourself "Can I see this in the diagram? Is this a fact or opinion?" you will get much better marks.

IELTS. WRITING PART 1. A CENTRAL HEATING SYSTEM

On In the diagramm we can see how a central heating system in a house is organised. There are some key features which will be described in this review. [UNNECESSARY FILLER/WAFFLE - ADDS NO VALUE TO THE DESCRIPTION]
First of all, cold water enters to the house from the water supply system and after which it has can travel one of two ways for further motion. One of these ways is to go to the water tank, which is needed to fill the storage tank. And the The other way is to go directly to the storage tank and after that it goes to taps or the boiler. In a individual houses two types of boiler are often used - working on gas or working on oil. [DOES THE DIAGRAM ACTUALLY TELL YOU THIS OR ARE YOU USING YOUR REAL WORLD KNOWLEDGE?] Usage of boiler is a good way to have a hot water in a house, which is essentially needed not only for washing hands, but also for heat up the radiators, which can rise the interior temperature and make living in this house more comfortable. [OPINION] We can see that a boiler is locates located near the pump, which is the engine of this system, the main task of which is to make the water flow through the pipes. Pipes with different diametres diameters are involvinged in a the process of heating the house - the further from the point of cold water entrance to the house, the smaller the diametreser of a pipe is. Also pipes have different functions, which depend on a the possition they takes are in. For example, in the water tank has pipes located at two levels of pipe location - one of the pipes is lower, the other is higher and exactly this pipe is used not only to transfer water, but also in emergency cases when the water tank is overflowsed.

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