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My short-term holidays was wonderful. I went to to concert with my friend. We got very good seats, not too far from the stage, not too close to. We were so lucky! The concert just like a party for Chinese in japan, cause the singers is Chinese, almost all the audiences are Chinese. When we were sitting and waiting for the concert to begin, I found an interesting phenomenon. There was big difference between Chinese and Japanese when they are waiting for show`s beginning. Chinese will be exciting. Talking or taking photos with their companions, playing in the joy way. But as for Japanese, they just will sit and wait for it quiet. And no photography during the whole show. Go back to the show, that was excellent. I enjoyed that so much. If somebody ask me to describe that show for one word, I will say [ that is a warn, healing, inspiring and funny concert.]
And yesterday we walked around Tokyo street aimlessly. To be honest, I like that way to relax. I live in Tokyo`s countryside, rarely see the sight of urban. I like to walk around urban, and compare how much different between countryside and urban. To enjoy the difference. We walked and walked, eventually, we got to the hotel that we stayed in when we just arrived in Japan. We didn`t do it on purpose, just as it happens. I admit that recalled me a lot by coming back there. I came to Japan with my friend at the period we know nothing about Tokyo. Now we were we, the hotel was as it is, but something was different. We got improve.
Happy to go back to the beginning with my friend. It was something for me, cause my friend would go back home country next month.
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My short-term holidays waswere wonderful.("holiday was wonderful") I went to toa concert with my friend. We got very good seats, not too far from the stage, not too close to. We were so lucky! The concert was just like a party for Chinese in Japan, because the singers isarewere Chinese, and almost all the audiences arewas Chinese. (If these concerts happen often and are continuing to happen and the singers and audience are usually Chinese, then you could use present tense "are Chinese" and "is Chinese")When we were sitting and waiting for the concert to begin, I found an interesting phenomenon. There was/is a big difference between Chinese and Japanese when they are waiting for a show`s beginning to start. Chinese will be excitinged. ("The exciting show excited the girl.") Talking or taking photos with their companions, playing in thea joyous way. But as for Japanese, they just will sit and wait for it quietly. And no photography during the whole show. Go back to the show, that was excellent.(Do you mean "But going back to the show, " to return to the subject of the show? "Go back to the show" sounds like you are saying it was so good someone should go to it again.) I enjoyed that so much. If somebody asked me to describe that show forwith one word, I will say [ that is a warm, healing, inspiring and funny concert.]("warn" is 注意 I think. And that's four words, not one. You said "with one word"?)And (then) yesterday we walked around Tokyo street aimlessly. To be honest, I like that way to relax. I live in Tokyo`s countryside, and rarely see the sight of urban areas. I like to walk around urban areas, and compare how much different betweenthe countryside is fromand urban areas. To enjoy the difference. We walked and walked. Eventually, we got to the hotel that we stayed in when we just arrived in Japan.
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And Yesterday we walked around a Tokyo street aimlessly. To be honest, I like that way doing that to relax. I live in Tokyo`s countryside, and rarely see the sight of an urban city. I like to walk around urban areas, and compare how much different it is between the countryside and the urban. To I enjoy the difference. We walked and walked, eventually, we got to the hotel that we stayed in when we had just arrived in Japan. We didn`t do it on purpose, just as it happens it just happened. I admit that recalled me I remembered a lot by coming going back there coming here/going there. I came to Japan with my friend at the period a time when we knew nothing about Tokyo. Now we were we here, the hotel was as it is was, but something was different. We got improve better.
I was happy to go back to the beginning with my friend. It was something important for me, cause my friend will go back home to the/to her This depends on whether she is from the rural area, or another country country next month.
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We didn`t do it on purpose, just as it just happened.
("just as it happens" is okay too but sounds a little unnatural here, its usually used in other situations. "It just so happens that I have the book that you're looking for." "I was waiting forever for the meteor shower, and just as it happens, I trip and fall unconscious.") I admit that recalled me a lot to me by coming back there.("that brought back a lot of memories by coming back there/in going back there") I came to Japan with my friend and at the periodtime we knowew nothing about Tokyo. Now we were wehere, the hotel was as it iswas, but something was different. We got improve. (Not sure about "We got improve". Could be "We improved", but that's very ambiguous and strange there. "We were the ones that had changed" might be what you mean?)
Happy to go back to the beginning with my friend. It was something for me, because my friend wouldwill go back to her home country next month. (You would use "would" instead of "will" if you were describing something that had already happened, i.e., your friend had already gone back to her home country by now, but back then at the time of what you were describing, she hadn't left yet, but "would" soon. Never use "cause" as a conjunction. "cause" is used like "The cause of global warming is pollution" or "cause and effect" or "Cigarettes cause cancer". The conjunction is "because", から、ので、因为，using "cause" as a conjunction is slang.)
("just as it happens" is okay too but sounds a little unnatural here, its usually used in other situations. "It just so happens that I have the book that you're looking for." "I was waiting forever for the meteor shower, and just as it happens, I trip and fall unconscious.") I admit that recalled me a lot to me by coming back there.("that brought back a lot of memories by coming back there/in going back there") I came to Japan with my friend and at the periodtime we knowew nothing about Tokyo. Now we were wehere, the hotel was as it iswas, but something was different. We got improve. (Not sure about "We got improve". Could be "We improved", but that's very ambiguous and strange there. "We were the ones that had changed" might be what you mean?)
Happy to go back to the beginning with my friend. It was something for me, because my friend wouldwill go back to her home country next month. (You would use "would" instead of "will" if you were describing something that had already happened, i.e., your friend had already gone back to her home country by now, but back then at the time of what you were describing, she hadn't left yet, but "would" soon. Never use "cause" as a conjunction. "cause" is used like "The cause of global warming is pollution" or "cause and effect" or "Cigarettes cause cancer". The conjunction is "because", から、ので、因为，using "cause" as a conjunction is slang.)
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