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A crucial question that arises is what kind of information we might expect from celebrities using social networks? The answer seems to reflect somehow their personalities in the real life. For example Barack Obama shows a formal yet relaxed style when using Twitter, he can express his concern regarding official issues and also post a photograph of his dog playing with his children. Artists can be more controversial since their fame sometimes is fed by scandals and not necessarilly their talents.
We should not be surprised when we see normal anonymous people behaving the same way. The TV has no longer the privilege of conditioning society by itself, now that role is shared with the growing influence of social networks. The future generations will grow in this new digital enviroment, it depends on us and on the rules that we establish that they live with their feet on the ground and not in the fantasy world created by social networks.
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Could someone correct this short text? Thanks a lot!
A crucial question that arises is what kind of information we might expect from celebrities using social networks? Their answers seems to reflect how their personalities are in the real life. For example Barack Obama shows a formal, yet relaxed style when using Twitter. He can express his concerns regarding official issues, but at the same time, he can also post a photograph of his dog playing with his children. Artists can be more controversial since their fame is usually fed through scandals and not necessarily their talents.We should not be surprised when we see normal anonymous (Due to the context that you are presenting in your work (i.e Twitter), let's assume that Twitter users cannot be anonymous) people behaving the same way. Television no longer has the ability to condition society, but the role have been passed over to social media. Future generations will grow in this new digital environment, and it will depend on us and on the rules that we establish, with the idea that they will live with their feet on the ground and not indulge in the fantasy world created by social media
Social media = social networking sites, applications and other sites where contents based on the number of users participating and the contents generated by users themselves. I put this down because I thought it would be more convenient and more inclusive.
And also, your English is really good! Keep it up! :)
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