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should women return to the kitchen?
With the development of society, there are increasing women going outside home to be working mother. As a matter of fact, some people still think that women should return to the kitchen where they should work.
Among these people, some consider women are suitable for looking after family because of their patience, carefulness, and blindness. They can teach children how to do some housework and take care themselves well. The others also think breadwinner work hard even work overtime or second jobs to earn more money to support family. They are supposed to have a comfortable, cozy and relaxed environment which women create at home after working for a day.
We know above but we don't know household women suffer from inner pains such as loneliness and in confidence. We might think they are happy for the simple life which they don't need to work hard in company and just cooking, cleaning, picking up children, shopping, etc . But to Tell the truth, they have to stay at home for her family and haven't her own salary so that some people might not show the same respect for her as for husband.
Besides, we can't waste the wealth of women's gift which contributes to society. They ought not to lose the social class. There are a large quantity of jobs need women not man to do like confinement nurse. If they return to the kitchen, the development of society will be slower than before due to decline of competitive power in work.
What's more, father also can fulfill all a child's need. Except for the qualities mother has, father also can explore, play riddles, climb mountains, etc outside activities. If mother works outside, father can have much more time to stay with children, and family has double wages.
Last but not least, men will be not able to replace women. Women shouldn't return to the kitchen, which is beneficial to family and society.
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Should women return to the kitchen?With the development of society, there are increasingly more women going outside the home to be working mothers. But as a matter of fact, some people still think that women should return to the kitchen where they should work.
Among these people, some consider women are suitable for looking after family because of their patience, carefulness, and blindness. They can teach children how to do some housework and take care of themselves well. The others also think, the breadwinners work hard and even work overtime or second jobs to earn more money to support their families. Some people also believe the breadwinners are supposed to have a comfortable, cozy and relaxed environment which women create at home after working all day.
We know the above, but we don't know household women suffer from inner pains such as loneliness and a lack confidence. We might think they are happy for a simple life, in which they don't need to work hard in a company, and just do cooking, cleaning, picking up children, shopping, etc . But to tell the truth, women have to stay at home for their families and haven't got their own salary, so some people might not show the same respect for her as for her husband.
Besides, we can't waste the wealth of gifts that women contribute to society. They ought not to lose their social class. There are a large quantity of jobs needed to be done by women not men, such as confinement nurse. If women return to the kitchen, the development of society will be slower than before due the to decline of competitive power in the workforce.
What's more, a father also can fulfill all a child's needs. Except for the qualities a mother has, a father also can explore, play riddles, climb mountains, etc and outside activities. If the mother works outside, the father can have much more time to stay with their children, and the family has double wages.
Last but not least, men will be not able to replace women. Women shouldn't return to the kitchen, this is beneficial to family and society.
Notes:
the word "but" helps the reader understand that the next sentence is different or contrary to the first sentence.
starting paragraphs with words such as "besides" and "what's more" are correct and more casual, but not formal. But we use them all the time for speaking.
I may have used different sentence structure, but your writing is comprehensive. Good title :)
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