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A nice day Today, me and my daughters made a short trekking whith my friends and their children into the fields next to their children's school. The children ran, laughed and played each other while we (the adults) had an interesting talk about different topics. We found a small native forest wich almost nobody visit. Inside it were plenty of a bush called Quila (a type of bamboo) and many lianas. There were also some old trees which were very impressives and awe-inspirings. We found a honeycomb inside a tree, altough it wasn't easy to discover because the entrance was in a small knot of the trunk. Were it not for the constant flow of bees in and out of the knot we wouldn't notice it at all. At the end of the day all toghether shared a delicious meal in the house of one of my friends, the kids ate first and then played again while we took advantage of that and ate in a relative peace. I really enjoy these simple moments because they make me feel as I were part of a big family or a tribe.

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A nice day

Today, me and my daughters my daughters and I made a short trekking whith with my friends and their children into the fields next to their children's school. The children ran, laughed and played with each other while we (the adults) had an interesting talk about different topics. We found a small native (what do you mean "native") forest wich which almost nobody visits. Inside it were plenty of a bushes called Quila (a type of bamboo) (I might even go so far as to change it to "Inside it there were plenty of Quila bushes") and many lianas (Is this an English word or just a special name for the plant?). There were also some old trees which were very impressives and awe-inspirings. We found a honeycomb inside a tree, although it wasn't easy to discover because the entrance was in a small knot of the trunk. Were it not for the constant flow of bees in and out of the knot we wouldn't notice it at all. At the end of the day all toghether we shared a delicious meal together / all together in the house of one of my friends,. tThe kids ate first and then played again while we took advantage of that (It sounds odd to use "that" here. You should state specifically what you took advantage of, like "their absence", "the time we had away from them/the kids", etc.) and ate in a relative peace. I really enjoy these simple moments because they make me feel as if I were part of a big family or a tribe.


Great job!

1. People speaking may say "me and my daughters", but it is considered incorrect and you really shouldn't use it. Especially if you are writing.

2. Be careful about verbs that need prepositions: "played with"

3. English adjectives don't become plural when the noun becomes plural: trees (plural) -> impressive & awe-inspiring (NO s)

Sounds like you had a lovely day.

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