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Task 2 (IELTS test) TOPIC: More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. According to the statement, some people think that attracting the talent from poorer countries mean it could prevent them from growing its economies. However, there is economic theory enough that supports to encourage immigration as a way to tackle some obstacles that these economies are experiencing. We will further discuss some pros and cons in favor of free movement of people. First of all, I think it is clearly proved that the economic cycle is not linear as there are fluctuations. That´s why I consider that allowing this movement of people from poor countries towards those that are richer can help tackle, say, the unemployment and give some solutions to their problems. Secondly, these immigrants are likely to give a hand to their respective relatives, for instance, by sending money (a share of their salary). Therefore, it would help generate more economic growth in those economies. Thirdly, the economic theory has proven that a shortage of workers in richer countries would encourage immigration. At the same time, they would fill these vacancies and generate growth which would be invested abroad given that the cost of living is much cheaper and investments would be enormously more profitable. As a result, everybody would end up being better. On the other hand, not always the economic theory is fulfilled and what some argue is that fluent countries would get the qualified workers and the investment wouldn´t go abroad whether there is something going on such as a war or, more likely, economic instability or some common regulation in richer countries would not be guaranteed in countries less developed, and the investment is discouraged due to that uncertainty (the risk is too high). In conclusion, I truly believe that we can benefit a great deal by permitting free movement as everyone would end up being better to due the fact that it would generate growth and well-being in poor and rich countries.

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Task 2 (IELTS test)

TOPIC: More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine.
Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

According to the statement, some people think that attracting the talent from poorer countries means that it could prevent them from growing its their economies. However, there is enough economic theory enough that supports to encourage encouraging (or supports the encouragement of) immigration as a way to tackle some obstacles that these economies are experiencing. We will further discuss some pros and cons in favor of free movement of people.

First of all, I think it is clearly proved (better: it has been clearly proven) that the economic cycle is not linear as there are fluctuations. That´s why I consider that allowing this movement of people from poor countries towards those that are richer can help tackle, say, the unemployment and give some solutions to their problems. Secondly, these immigrants are likely to give a hand to their respective relatives, for instance, by sending money (a share of their salary). Therefore, it would help generate more economic growth in those economies. Thirdly, the economic theory has proven that a shortage of workers in richer countries would encourage immigration. At the same time, they would fill these vacancies and generate growth which would be invested abroad given that the cost of living is much cheaper and investments would be enormously more profitable. As a result, everybody would end up being better off.

On the other hand, not always the economic theory is not always fulfilled and what some argue is that fluent countries would get the qualified workers and the investment wouldn't go abroad whether where (or if) there is something going on such as a war or, more likely, economic instability or some common regulation in richer countries would not be guaranteed in countries less developed, and the investment is discouraged due to that uncertainty (the risk is too high).

In conclusion, I truly believe that we can benefit a great deal by permitting free movement as everyone would end up being better off to due to the fact that it would generate growth and well-being in both poor and rich countries.


Fantastic work Daniel! My corrections are in red and suggestions to sound more natural in blue and grey.

In the cases where I suggested removing the article ("the"), it's because it sounds more natural to me in this context that you are referring to things in general (economic theory, talent) rather than a specific theory or specific talent. However, the way you've written it could also be referring to a specific theory (the one about movement of workers) or talent (the talent from those countries), so it's not incorrect the way you wrote it, I just thought it sounded better without the article.

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