It was so embarrassing
I went to the swimming pool with my friends a hot day of summer in 1990. I was sixteen years old. There were a lot of people that day. We were looking a place to set our towels and lie on the grass when fortunately a friend of mine found a place next to the water.
Immediately we saw a group of boys looking at us. We wanted to take a bath and it seemed easy because we had the water very close to us but we had to take a shower before going into the water. Sadly we had to pass by the side of those guys to arrive until the shower.
We decided to get up and go towards the shower trying guys didn't notice about ours. I was the last of my friends I tried don’t be nervous but when I had begun to walk I stepped on a puddle so I slipped and I fell to the ground.
I didn’t want to look anywhere I only wanted to disappear but as soon as I could I had got up quickly and I went straight on. In the end, I kept all the attention of the boys and I felt horrible.
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It was so embarrassing
I went to the swimming pool with my friends on a hot day of summer in 1990. I was sixteen years old. There were a lot of people that day. We were looking a place to set our towels and lie on the grass when fortunately a friend of mine found a place next to the water.Immediately we saw a group of boys looking at us. We wanted to take a bath and it seemed easy because we had the water very close to us but we had to take a shower before going into the water. Sadly we had to pass by the side of those guys to arrive until the shower.
We decided to get up and go towards the shower hoping guys didn't notice us. I was the last of my friends I tried not to be nervous but when I had begun to walk I stepped in a puddle so I slipped and I fell to the ground.
I didn’t want to look anywhere. I only wanted to disappear. As soon as I could I had got up quickly and I walked straight on. In the end, I had all the attention of the boys and I felt horrible.
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It was so embarrassing
I went to the swimming pool with my friends on a hot day of summer in 1990. I was sixteen years old. There were a lot of people around that day. We were looking for a place to set our towels and lie on the grass when, fortunately, a friend of mine found a place next to the water.Immediately we saw a group of boys looking at us. We wanted to bathe* and it seemed easy because we had the water very close to us but we had to shower before going into the water. Sadly we had to pass by those guys to reach the shower.
We decided to get up and go towards the shower hoping the boys would not notice us. I was the last of my friends and I tried not to be nervous but when I began** to walk I stepped in a puddle so I slipped and fell to the ground.
I didn't want to look around me. I only wanted to disappear and as soon as I could I got up quickly and went straight on. In the end, I attracted the boys' complete attention and I felt horrible.
*to take a bath = to bathe in a bath at home.
**when I had begun to walk ... is also perfectly good English.
Very well written!
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It was so embarrassing
I went to a swimming pool with my friends on a hot day in the summer of 1990. I was sixteen years old then. There were a lot of people there on that day. We were looking a place to spread our towels so that we could lay on the grass when a friend of mine was fortunate enough to find a place next to the water.There and then, we saw a group of boys looking at us. We wanted to take a swim-- which was easy for us to do because the water was very close to us -- but we had to take a shower first before we could go into the water. Sadly, we had to pass
We decided to
I didn’t want to look around ( to find out who had seen me falling down) , for I just wanted to get out of there as quickly as possible -- and to walk straight on after getting myself up, as if nothing had happened. Whatever it was , I had captured all the attention of those boys . I felt horrible.
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