Could you point out my mistakes in the two paragraphs?
For students, vacation is a vital chance to improve personal abilities. However, opinions differ on how to take advantage of the valuable time. Some people contend that students should take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors which can broaden horizons. It may seem reasonable at first glance. However, if taking a closer look, volunteer works should be given more emphasis.
In conclusion, allowing to the fact that doing volunteer work can cultivate communication skills and make a better resume which aids us in future career, it is better for students to do volunteer works rather than taking another subject with no relationship to majors in vacations.
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Could you point out my mistakes in the two paragraphs?
For students, vacation is a vital chance to improve personal abilities. However, opinions differ on how to take advantage of the this valuable time. Some people contend that students should take a course on athe subject that has no direct connection to their majors, which can broaden horizons. It This may seem reasonable at first glance. However, if taking a closer look, I believe that volunteer works should be given more emphasis.In conclusion, allowing to the fact that doing volunteer work can cultivate communication skills and make a better resume, which aids us in achieving our future career goals, Therefore, it is better for students to do volunteer works while on vacation, rather than taking another subject course that has with no relationship to their majors in vacations.
Excellent job! I don't think anything you wrote was wrong. I just offered my thoughts on one way to make the paragraphs flow a bit more naturally. Hopefully it helped! Good luck!
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Could you point out my mistakes in the two paragraphs?
For students, the vacation is a vital chance to improve personal abilities. However, opinions differ on how to take advantage of the valuable time. Some people contend that students should take a course on the a subject that has no direct connection to their majors, which they believe can broaden horizons. It may seem reasonable at first glance; however, if we take a closer look, volunteer works ("Volunteer work" is singular because it encompasses all volunteering in general, not different and/or specific types of volunteering.) should be given more emphasis.In conclusion, allowing to the fact that doing volunteer work can cultivate communication skills and make a better resumes which that aids us in future careers, it is better for students to do volunteer works rather than taking another subject with no relationship to majors in during their vacations.
写得很好，June！错误很少，而且都不是大错误。 Keep up the good work! =)
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Could you point out my mistakes in these two paragraphs?*
For students, vacation is a vital chance to improve personal skills abilities. However, opinions differ on how to take advantage of the such valuable time. Some people contend suggest that students should could broaden their horizons by taking a course on the a subject that has no direct connection to their majors. which can broaden horizons. It This may seem reasonable at first glance; however, if taking a upon closer look inspection, one will see that volunteer works should be given more emphasis.**In conclusion, allowing to the fact presuming that doing volunteer work can cultivate communication skills and make a better improve students' resumes (which aids us in future career endeavors), it is better for students them to spend their vacation doing volunteer works rather than instead of taking another course subject with no relationship to outside of their majors in vacations.
*Your English is very clear! The changes I made are only polishes.
**Please be careful to avoid dangling gerunds / misplaced modifiers. Native speakers make this mistake all the time, so few people will notice. But it is not correct English. Good job otherwise!
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