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Invitation letter. Could you please help me to correct my stylistic mistakes? Dear _____! My name is Daria Smirnova, I am the representative of SU HSE student office. Currently we are working out schedule of SU HSE events taking place in Northern America 2017/2018 (with participation of SU HSE rector, professors and staff). We also want to involve SU HSE Alumi on them. The main purpose of involving alumni is communication and showing our US friends the most successful and interesting SU HSE graduates. Could you tell us, whether it will be interesting for you to participate in such kind of events in the future? If so, we will keep you informed. The nearby one tentative will take place on April 4. at 6pm in the Gen Club of New York. Could you tell us, in case if this meeting will be organized, could you participate in it? Best regards, Daria

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Invitation letter. Could you please help me to correct my stylistic mistakes?

Dear _____!
My name is Daria Smirnova. I am the representative of the SU HSE student office.
Currently, we are working out a schedule of SU HSE events taking place in Northern America between 2017 and 2018 (with participation of from the SU HSE director, professors and staff). We also want to involve SU HSE alumni on them in the events and/or planning process. The main purpose of involving alumni is communication. and showing We want to show our US friends the most successful and interesting SU HSE graduates. Could you tell us whether it will be interesting for you to participate if you are interested in participating in such kind of events in the future? If so, we will keep you informed.
The nearby one closest tentative event will take place on April 4th at 6pm in the Gen Club of New York. Could you tell us, in case if this meeting will be is organized, whether or not you could you participate in join us for it?

Best regards,
Daria

Here you go, Dashulja. I've edited it to make it sound more natural/professional. Please let me know if you have any questions =)

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Invitation letter. Could you please help me to correct my stylistic mistakes?

Dear _____!
My name is Daria Smirnova. I am representing the student office of SU HSE . I am the representative of SU HSE student office.
Currently, we are working out the schedule for the SU HSE events to be held in north America by SU HSE for 2017- 2018 . With the rector, professors and staff of SU HSE already participating, we also hope that our alumni will join us in these events. The main purpose of having our alumni in these events is to show to our US friends some of our most successful and interesting graduates of SU HSE . Therefore, you being an alumnus of our school, we like to know if you are interested in participating in any of these events.  If you are keen, , we will then keep you informed.
The nearby one tentative date for the earliest event will be April 4 at 6pm in the Gen Club in New York. Could you tell us, in the event that this meeting is confirmed to be held on that date, if you are keen to participate in it?

Best regards,
Daria

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