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My girlfrend I have a girlfrend,She is very beautiful,I met her in a bus,when I met her that I know ,she is the person that I am loonking for. On the way,I write a word on my phone "I want to make friends with you could you give me your phone number",then she give me her phone number .That day was my best day in my life.A week later she became my girlfrend .She said when she saw me she knows I am the one.And we have live together for two years,In next year I want to be her husband.We will hve a good live.

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My girlfriend

I have a girlfrend,She who is very beautiful. I met her in on a bus; when I met her that day, I knew that she was the person that I was looking for. (注意时态！这都是过去的事，所以一定要用过去时态。)
On the way After we parted ways, I wrote a word message to her on my phone: "I want to make be friends with you. Could you give me your phone number?" Then she gave me her phone number. That day was my best day in of my life. A week later, she became my girlfriend. She said when she saw me, she knows also knew I am was the one, and we have lived (<--"Lived"是住在一起的意思。这词用的对吗？) together for two years. In Next year, I want to be her husband. We will have a good life together.

你好 Foolish Fish。我帮你修改了一下，希望能帮助你。请注意英文的标点符号规则：逗号、句号、问号、感叹号、引号和分号前面没有空格，而后面永远有空格。

如果你还有问题，请别怕问。继续加油学习！ =)

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My girlfriend

I have a girlfriend.She is very beautiful. I met her on a bus. when I met her I knew that she is the person that I am looking for.
On the way,I wrote a word on my phone "I want to make friends with you could you give me your phone number",then she gave me her phone number .That day was the  best day of my life.A week later she became my girlfriend .She said when she saw me she knew I am the one and we have been living together for two years,In next year I want to be her husband.We will have a good life.

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